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'Stubbornly Determined' - 'Common app prompt 3' essay



Beck23 1 / 1  
Nov 17, 2014   #1
Reflect on a time when you challenged a belief or idea. What prompted you to act? Would you make the same decision again?

Stubbornly Determined

I watched closely as our team instructor moved his hands around the bamboos like the superhero flash.

First, tie a small knot around these connecting bamboos. Then pull a barrel under the joints and tie them up with the stronger ropes.

''Why the hell is my head spinning?'' I thought to myself.

Looking around, I caught a glimpse of the two Thai girls smiling at me. I bet they knew that I have never even tied knots let alone build a bamboo raft.

I kept on tying a single knot for five minutes.

''Really, five minutes? Now, if I only knew how to tie...'' I thought, feeling embarrassed for my shortcoming.

To my surprise, our team finished first, not to mention without much of my help!

It was time to take the hand-built raft to water. To think tying knots is as easy as it sounds- I have been learning how wrong I was- the hard way.

The Borneo Youth Leadership Conference had many surprises for us, its delegates. The water rafting race on a tropical rain forest resort was only one of them! The race was about to start. Five teams on their mark, we would have to row forward to the other side of the lake- come back to the starting point and unbind the raft in order to win.

To think back, I must confess that the setting where I was brought up was rather restrictive. My parents only wanted me to go to school regularly and get good grades. I, on the other hand, wanted to challenge myself by coming out of my comfort zone, to embrace different views and have new experiences. I believe with risk comes responsibilities which lead to ardent endeavors. If there's one thing about me, I am stubbornly determined.

Putting on my life-jacket, I knew I had to make up for my previous mess of tying knots. Even though, I was slightly nervous as I could not swim, I willingly took the lead of our crew. I sat on the front right corner to cheer up my team members, I promised that no matter what, we will give our best and win for sure. I could not back down. I would rather fail miserably or even publicly than to not live up to my promise.

I cleared my mind, as the whistle blew, I started screaming: one, two row; one, two row and everyone followed my pace.

No later than a few strokes, we left every other raft behind. Trust me; our paddling rhythm was as consistent as the clock's repeated ticks. After screaming quite hard and shedding enough sweat, we were the first team to unbind our raft.

I had been so focused on the race that I overlooked the blow I got on my right toe from my own paddle. A few minutes and two Band-Aids later, I was back on track, ready to conquer the next obstacle.

Similarly, in my other endeavors which may be from attempting a bike stunt to organizing student council events or solving calculus, I refuse to give up until I prove myself to perfection. I am not bothered about stumbling, as I know that I can get back up no matter how big the obstacle is. Let's just say, I am determined to be successful and not worried about the struggle.

However low I may feel, I still try to find a silver lining in every situation. Challenging society's 'follow the crowd' doctrine enabled me to change from a fixed mindset to a growth mindset. To setbacks and failures, I say 'What's the dignity in not even trying? With time and effort, I will learn to do it tomorrow if not today.'

My first steps might be as trivial as learning to tie a knot, but I am ready to face whatever challenge life brings.

admission2012 - / 475  
Nov 17, 2014   #2
People often ask me, "How can schools pick which students to reject and which to accept because so many have the same credentials?" I often reply that although most students have great grades, sat scores etc, most fail to answer the essay prompts correctly. Failing to answer the essay prompt is the #1 and I mean #1 reason why otherwise qualified students get rejected. This essay is simply NOT what this prompt is about. It is asking you about a time that you challenged an idea or belief, not about you not following the crowd. Present an actual belief or idea and talk about how/why you felt you had to challenge it. More than any other common app topic, this one provides applicants with the license to really show gumption. To show that they are a leader, a critical thinker, an altruistic individual and yet, we constantly get submissions like this one, safe, very safe and most annoyingly - not on topic. - Admissions Advice Online
OP Beck23 1 / 1  
Nov 17, 2014   #3
Thank you for the response. I will write another essay on this prompt. And do you think it fits prompt 1 ? So after writing I can compare them before submitting.


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