Hi :) this common app short essay has to be 150 words or fewer.
i wrote about vounteering for community service.
mine is currently 216 words, and i cannot make it shorter =( ahhhh
please take a look! Thank you :)
also please give me a feedback =) Thanks!
On Friday afternoons, I meet senior citizens at Sunrise Senior Center and play piano and flute. Challenges abound in Alzheimer's care: someone needs to use the bathroom every second or is so sick that calling 911 is necessary. At first, the time I spent there seemed meaningless. However, after observing a resident's tears, I never again thought about quitting.
One day, I played Take Me Home, Country Roads. After the performance, Mary, a resident, moved next to me. Tears streamed down her face. She said, "Will you play this song again?" I nodded and began to sing and play again.
As the song approached the climax, I stopped. I moved Mary's wheelchair beside the piano and said, "Mary, I need your help to finish this song. Would you hold my hand?" She held it in both of hers. We successfully finished the song. No longer crying, Mary looked satisfied. The manager said, "You made Mary think of this place as home."
I still spend my Fridays with senior citizens. A moment with these citizens gratifies me. They gave me precious opportunities to discover myself and realize a different aspect of life. They enriched my life with innocence and love. Next year, I'll find a new home that's miles away, but they'll always be by my side.
i wrote about vounteering for community service.
mine is currently 216 words, and i cannot make it shorter =( ahhhh
please take a look! Thank you :)
also please give me a feedback =) Thanks!
On Friday afternoons, I meet senior citizens at Sunrise Senior Center and play piano and flute. Challenges abound in Alzheimer's care: someone needs to use the bathroom every second or is so sick that calling 911 is necessary. At first, the time I spent there seemed meaningless. However, after observing a resident's tears, I never again thought about quitting.
One day, I played Take Me Home, Country Roads. After the performance, Mary, a resident, moved next to me. Tears streamed down her face. She said, "Will you play this song again?" I nodded and began to sing and play again.
As the song approached the climax, I stopped. I moved Mary's wheelchair beside the piano and said, "Mary, I need your help to finish this song. Would you hold my hand?" She held it in both of hers. We successfully finished the song. No longer crying, Mary looked satisfied. The manager said, "You made Mary think of this place as home."
I still spend my Fridays with senior citizens. A moment with these citizens gratifies me. They gave me precious opportunities to discover myself and realize a different aspect of life. They enriched my life with innocence and love. Next year, I'll find a new home that's miles away, but they'll always be by my side.
