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please write a concise narrative in which you describe a meaningful event, experience or accomplishment in your life and how it will affect your college experience or your contribution to the UF campus community.
"Kay, Kay, you hear me? I said turn to the index. What's wrong with you?"
"... ... .. .. "
I rushed out of the classroom, tears was running uncontrollably out of my eyes, leaving my classmates and teacher completely astonished .
With no warning, my life turned into an unprecedential disaster. The "hyperactive and diligent me" was lost in the midst of a stormy ocean, gloomy, fatigued, and depressed. In grade 9, I could not help to skip school; I slept until I could no even feel myself, and pathetically, had shown zero interest in former hobbies, academic study, friends, or anything. On school days, I remembered how I stared at my chapter test paper for 75 minutes, wrote down nothing, and drove my Physics teacher insane. I felt worthless, in order to release my anger, at some point I started to cut my arm and after every cut I poured salt on the it so that it would give a transient "pleasure". If it was not that one of the infected wounds almost killed me, I might still be indulging in my metabolous world.
I decided that I had to change. After some psychological counseling, it was elucidated that what made me miserable was called a Major Depressive Disorder. So desperate I was, I began doing research upon my problem in order to find a cure. Although it is hard to pull out from a depression and even harder to accomplish with no exterior help, I believed that determination would make everything possible. Indeed, there were days I felt so bad that suicidal thoughts kept coming forth. I could not stop, since I had no choice, but to pursue a normal life. Luckily, I overcame all the obstacles and through a session of studies, I refound myself though an episode of relaxation therapy and self-encouragement, and most importantly, I was fascinated by the complexity of psychology and dedicated myself to studying it.
This year, I have taken Psychology 12 as a supplement course, but my thirst to psychology is far not contented by just three classes a week. In an effort to learn psychology better, I even read books associate with psychology during lunchtime.
Since I know what it feels like to ensure a psychological disorder, I have never stopped dreaming about being a successful psychiatrist and help people with such problems out of misery. I'd like to devote myself wholly for psychology. University of Florida meant to me not only superior education, but also a maturation process for me to acquired the capacity and confidence to succeed in my career.
please write a concise narrative in which you describe a meaningful event, experience or accomplishment in your life and how it will affect your college experience or your contribution to the UF campus community.
Student Depression
"Kay, Kay, you hear me? I said turn to the index. What's wrong with you?"
"... ... .. .. "
I rushed out of the classroom, tears was running uncontrollably out of my eyes, leaving my classmates and teacher completely astonished .
With no warning, my life turned into an unprecedential disaster. The "hyperactive and diligent me" was lost in the midst of a stormy ocean, gloomy, fatigued, and depressed. In grade 9, I could not help to skip school; I slept until I could no even feel myself, and pathetically, had shown zero interest in former hobbies, academic study, friends, or anything. On school days, I remembered how I stared at my chapter test paper for 75 minutes, wrote down nothing, and drove my Physics teacher insane. I felt worthless, in order to release my anger, at some point I started to cut my arm and after every cut I poured salt on the it so that it would give a transient "pleasure". If it was not that one of the infected wounds almost killed me, I might still be indulging in my metabolous world.
I decided that I had to change. After some psychological counseling, it was elucidated that what made me miserable was called a Major Depressive Disorder. So desperate I was, I began doing research upon my problem in order to find a cure. Although it is hard to pull out from a depression and even harder to accomplish with no exterior help, I believed that determination would make everything possible. Indeed, there were days I felt so bad that suicidal thoughts kept coming forth. I could not stop, since I had no choice, but to pursue a normal life. Luckily, I overcame all the obstacles and through a session of studies, I refound myself though an episode of relaxation therapy and self-encouragement, and most importantly, I was fascinated by the complexity of psychology and dedicated myself to studying it.
This year, I have taken Psychology 12 as a supplement course, but my thirst to psychology is far not contented by just three classes a week. In an effort to learn psychology better, I even read books associate with psychology during lunchtime.
Since I know what it feels like to ensure a psychological disorder, I have never stopped dreaming about being a successful psychiatrist and help people with such problems out of misery. I'd like to devote myself wholly for psychology. University of Florida meant to me not only superior education, but also a maturation process for me to acquired the capacity and confidence to succeed in my career.