Rutgers essay
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Essay:
I am a very curious individual, always wanting to know the why and how of things. I have varied interests and my curiosity was not limited to just mechanical toys or objects; insects and reptiles also fascinate me.
I have vivid memories of my childhood activities; for example when I was only 12; I brought together my colony friends with the idea of making our own car that would run on Steam. We drafted designs. Then we visited various local car mechanics and questioned them about how a car functions. 'AA Book of the Car' proved to be quite helpful. The drafts and drawings are still a constant reminder of my innovative spirit.
In school, I always showed a deeper interest in Science part-1, which covered more of Physics and some Chemistry. In Math, Geometry is what I always excelled in. Participating in various Olympiads and workshops immensely helped me in developing different skills.
Besides academics, I captained my school cricket team and being a pace bowler I had to have immense focus on the field which manifested positively in my academic activities.
My team won the first prize at Mig-29 aero modelling inter school contest. I have leaded my school team at many other project based inter-school science competitions. I have also participated in various wildlife exploration camps and courses on photography to nurture my passion for it and develop my skills. My membership in the debate club immensely helped me in developing conversational skills.
One of the most defining moments in my life was my participation in the 2008 INTERNATIONAL SPACE SETTLEMENT DESIGN CONTEST sponsored by NASA. The most unique feature of my project was the creation of an artificial radiation shield for the settlement working on the principle of earth's magnetosphere. I came across this competition on the Internet, just five days prior to its submission deadline I never thought about it pessimistically. I worked day and night and managed to bag an Honorable mention. It was a challenging experience.
I once happened to read the biography of India's ex-President-Dr. A.P.J. Abdul Kalam- 'Wings of Fire'. Although He eventually became a rocket scientist, during his course he had to work on various highly diverse projects ranging from hovercrafts to sounding rockets, ballistic missiles to the jet engine of a fighter plane and a PSLV to nuclear tests. I comprehended that engineering was the career course that I wanted to pursue not only because of the wide range of choices it opens up, but also because of the opportunity it provides to use one's creativity to its fullest.
Space has always mystified me, particularly the question of the existence of extraterrestrial life. I wish to work on the development of space exploration technologies like the spacecrafts and rovers and dream of solving the mysteries of space and time and about the existence of extra terrestrial life. I aspire to become an expert in aerospace design.
Rutgers is considered as one of the most diverse National University and the city of New Jersey itself claims to have the widest array of nationalities and socioeconomic backgrounds. Studying in such a diverse environment would help me increase my understanding of other cultures and appreciate their way of life. I myself coming from a very varied communal background like in India will be able to contribute a lot to this already diverse environment.
The metropolitan setting of the university is best suited for internships; Getting hands-on experience rather than just theoretical knowledge is definitely what I would prefer.
I read about the Senior Design Projects at the 2008 - Mechanical and Aerospace Senior Design Project Exhibition at Rutgers and was energized looking at the list of various projects assigned; especially- the space elevator; and I'm eager to be a part of the engineering program and undertake such exciting tasks.
kindly help me edit out a few lines to decrease the length of my essay.
Essay:
I am a very curious individual, always wanting to know the why and how of things. I have varied interests and my curiosity was not limited to just mechanical toys or objects; insects and reptiles also fascinate me.
I have vivid memories of my childhood activities; for example when I was only 12; I brought together my colony friends with the idea of making our own car that would run on Steam. We drafted designs. Then we visited various local car mechanics and questioned them about how a car functions. 'AA Book of the Car' proved to be quite helpful. The drafts and drawings are still a constant reminder of my innovative spirit.
In school, I always showed a deeper interest in Science part-1, which covered more of Physics and some Chemistry. In Math, Geometry is what I always excelled in. Participating in various Olympiads and workshops immensely helped me in developing different skills.
Besides academics, I captained my school cricket team and being a pace bowler I had to have immense focus on the field which manifested positively in my academic activities.
My team won the first prize at Mig-29 aero modelling inter school contest. I have leaded my school team at many other project based inter-school science competitions. I have also participated in various wildlife exploration camps and courses on photography to nurture my passion for it and develop my skills. My membership in the debate club immensely helped me in developing conversational skills.
One of the most defining moments in my life was my participation in the 2008 INTERNATIONAL SPACE SETTLEMENT DESIGN CONTEST sponsored by NASA. The most unique feature of my project was the creation of an artificial radiation shield for the settlement working on the principle of earth's magnetosphere. I came across this competition on the Internet, just five days prior to its submission deadline I never thought about it pessimistically. I worked day and night and managed to bag an Honorable mention. It was a challenging experience.
I once happened to read the biography of India's ex-President-Dr. A.P.J. Abdul Kalam- 'Wings of Fire'. Although He eventually became a rocket scientist, during his course he had to work on various highly diverse projects ranging from hovercrafts to sounding rockets, ballistic missiles to the jet engine of a fighter plane and a PSLV to nuclear tests. I comprehended that engineering was the career course that I wanted to pursue not only because of the wide range of choices it opens up, but also because of the opportunity it provides to use one's creativity to its fullest.
Space has always mystified me, particularly the question of the existence of extraterrestrial life. I wish to work on the development of space exploration technologies like the spacecrafts and rovers and dream of solving the mysteries of space and time and about the existence of extra terrestrial life. I aspire to become an expert in aerospace design.
Rutgers is considered as one of the most diverse National University and the city of New Jersey itself claims to have the widest array of nationalities and socioeconomic backgrounds. Studying in such a diverse environment would help me increase my understanding of other cultures and appreciate their way of life. I myself coming from a very varied communal background like in India will be able to contribute a lot to this already diverse environment.
The metropolitan setting of the university is best suited for internships; Getting hands-on experience rather than just theoretical knowledge is definitely what I would prefer.
I read about the Senior Design Projects at the 2008 - Mechanical and Aerospace Senior Design Project Exhibition at Rutgers and was energized looking at the list of various projects assigned; especially- the space elevator; and I'm eager to be a part of the engineering program and undertake such exciting tasks.
