'three dimensional problems' - BROWN Supp

Why are you drawn to the area(s) of study you indicated?
(300 ch. word limit)

It always amazes me how we interact with the nature and with each other, forming a giant network. From this simple truth, we have created a quite complicated interactive system, and by studying economics, I will be able to analyze this system and seek for the ways to improve efficiency and equality. (300 characters)

A distinctive feature of the Brown Curriculum is the opportunity to be the architect of your education. Why does this academic environment appeal to you?

(700 ch. word limit)

We live in a three dimensional world with three dimensional problems; they are multidisciplinary in nature. Though I want to major in economics, I know that economics alone will not provide sufficient answers to the challenges we are facing. Therefore, during my undergraduate years, I want to acquaint myself with various disciplines that will help me analyze economy from various perspectives such as psychology, sociology, and history. I am strongly confident that my education and experience under the Brown Curriculum will prepare me to tackle the real life problems and to maximize my potential; I would like to explore the ocean of knowledge in a spirit of free inquiry at Brown University.

Your first sentence includes nature. I'm not sure how nature is supposed to related with economics. I would change your first sentence... maybe something with the economy? Wall St.? stocks?


I like this one. Sounds great! Good luck! It'd be nice if you revised mine too :)

How does what you write have to do with economics? It seems more like psychology to me.

I too like the second one

Nice job. "strongly confident" sounds a bit awkward. Also, "under the Brown curriculum" might be revised to "in" or "with"

I was just about to say what jgb said! Strongly confident is awkward and a bit redundant. Other than that your essay is solid.

Why are you drawn to the area(s) of study you indicated?
(300 ch. word limit)

I am always amazed by the ways we interact with the nature and with each other, forming a giant network. From this simple truth, we have created a quite complicated interactive system, and by studying economics, I will be able to analyze this system and seek for the ways to improve efficiency and equality. (300 characters)

A distinctive feature of the Brown Curriculum is the opportunity to be the architect of your education. Why does this academic environment appeal to you?

(700 ch. word limit)

We live in a three dimensional world with three dimensional problems; they are multidisciplinary in nature. Though I want to major in economics, I know that economicsit alone will not provide sufficient answers to the challenges we are facingface. Therefore, during my undergraduate years, I want to acquaint myself with various disciplines that will help me analyze economyeconomics from various perspectives such as psychology, sociology, and history. I am strongly confident that my education and experience under the Brown Curriculum will prepare me to tackle the real life problems and to maximize my potential. I would like to explore the ocean of knowledge in a spirit of free inquiry at Brown University.

good, try to make it pop a little more--grab the reader's interest. explain your correlation between nature and economics in the first question.