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It only took about 10 years of public schooling for me to finally appreciate science.



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Nov 29, 2016   #1
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It only took about 10 years of public schooling for me to finally appreciate science as not just a grade on my report card but also as something that could be so versatile as to wow a crowd one moment and save lives the next. Every science class I'd had before Mrs. Gurley's Pre-AP Chemistry/Physics class had been textbook based, experiments few and far between. Although that can be a viable way to learn some concepts, science is primarily a learning based in experimentation. For example, the first day of class we made buttermilk pancakes in order to better understand scientific procedure and the basis of chemical reactions. Learning about acid and base reactions through buttermilk and baking soda in pancakes was a creative way our teacher made science something tangible to us. We went on to do other exciting experiments like better understanding the laws of physics by pushing Mrs. Gurley's Honda Civic around the school parking lot, and burning different chemicals over bunsen burners to examine their flame colors. That class also proved to me just how closely science and math could be intertwined, introducing equation balancing and physics equations into my life. It wasn't until I had my first biology class did I realize that biochemistry was the college major for me. Even without the innovative experiments Mrs. Gurley provided for us, learning about DNA and the chemical components of the human body made up for the dullness of the teaching style employed by my biology teacher.

Holt  Educational Consultant - / 15347  
Nov 30, 2016   #2
Allana, I think that your narration can be better improved if you skip talking about the dullness of your previous classes first. It gives a bad impression of you to the reader / reviewer to hear a statement bordering on the negative so early on in the statement. I find that your essay was actually more enjoyable and interesting when you go directly to the fun time that you had learning in Mrs. Gurley's class. That definitely highlights the reasons why you would look into further pursuing the biochemistry field in college. My suggestion is that you reverse your essay. First talk about the interesting and fun part then gloss over the statement about how boring science could be if it was only text based. This time, thank Mrs. Gurley for not just basing science on the text, but making it fun to learn in a more practical manner. Say something about learning about the practical applications of science through her motivational classes which led to your current ambitions in the science field. That way, the essay should end on a stronger note.


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