I have wanted to pursue business in order to become an engaging businesswoman and to apply my skills to better serve my community.
^How do you intend to serve your community by being a businesswoman exactly?
I began to immerse myself in current events to learn how the crisis came about, and found the world to be a classroom outside my campus.
^By current events, do you just mean reading the news? Or did you do something, perhaps, more proactive?
In contrast to my assumption, his knowledge of economics and current events was astounding, and enabled him to effectively explain the theories.
^Just because he was Nigerian, with a thick acent, you assumed that the professor may have been incapable of having a strong knowledge base of Economics? Hmmm.
I imagined I had blonde hair like many of my classmates, but could not understand why they did not want to play with me.
^All this suggests that you are disillusioned to the point you can not even recognize your own hair color.
The culture was astonishing beyond my imagination and I was addicted to the energy of the people.
^Well, given that you could imagine you had blonde hair, I am not sure if this being 'beyond your imagination' says much.
Your first essay could be stronger by explaining certain statements you have made.
Your second essay, is the typical ''I have discovered my cultural heritage'' essay, and there is nothign really unique about your discovery. As it is not particularly unique, it is unlikely to leave a lasting impression on your readers. Just bear that in mind.