Write an essay in which you tell us about someone who has made an impact on your life and explain how and why this person is important to you.
I don't know but my writing style works or not ... so if it goes off topic please tell me.
All advise will be appreciated... please be as strict and mean as you could. Thank you.
Long ago, for as long as I could remember, there were wars and disasters. At that time, time that people had to face difficulties struggling for their existences, an ordinary person was born into an extraordinary family of ten; each of them represented a unique power, except for "him". Being born as a normal person in such a strange family like his was not a pleasure for him; yet because of his "abnormality", he found himself a big time loser surrounded by awesome people. Despite of their superior powers, they preferred working hard as a normal family, waking up before the God of Sunset in order to begin their works on the fields of burning fire and finishing when the Sun met the Moon. Unfortunately, our main character was unable to go to school due to his poverty; despite of his young age and his ordinariness, he tended to work as hard as he could trying not to be his family's embarrassment even though no one think of him that way. At the age of nine, fortunately, Fate finally smiled with his family, by the end of Sunny season, their crops had been all sold to the God of Luck; consequently, with the money that his parents got from their beneficial business plus the countable amount of money which had been preserved for such a long time since they moved to this town, he was sent to school, and also his siblings. As the result, the fact that he was able to be acknowledged by the elders changed his live (not so much but somehow it did).
Maybe his life would be as normal as it supposed to be if he hadn't make the most daring decision of his life: moving out of his house, separated from his family, in order to find the true meaning of life and the reason why he existed. Time went by as our traveller keep going to find his destination, at last, he saw a crowded place where shocked him with its weirdness. In there, our young man realized that this place was very unfamiliar with him; he did not know whether he could live in such a chaotic place like this or not. Without any hesitations in his mind, the man began to start his new life in this new town.
At first, he tried to find a job so that he can earn for his living; the first attempt was failed. Unexpectedly, the first failure was followed by many other failures. Therefore, failing so many times had pushed him down to the hole of desperation and depression. However, he had not reached his end yet. Later then, with the helping hand from the Fairy of hope, he soon recognized that everyone had, at least once, failed in their life and even though one failed if he/she knew how to accept and take that failure as a part of his/her acknowledges process, he/she would become the wisdom; however, if not, loser he/she would be. Consequently, he stood up, kept telling to himself those words:" even if I fall, I will stand up tall", and once again tried his luck but in another way; he went to the Temple of Knowledge so that he could learn something valuable. During his training with the Master, he had to overcome many difficulties such as passing the Ocean of experiences, climbing to the top of Mt. Awareness, etc. By the time his training was accomplished, he had mastered the art of being fittest to this dramatic society. He became more mature and one more important thing need to tell about this guy was that he had found what his real powers were. They were not neither super strength nor high intelligence; they were the power of never-give-up, the power of belief, and last but not least the power of venturesome. Finally, he has succeeded with the way that he has chosen to follow.
Walking out of my dream as a hero, my father stands in front of me, waking me up and telling me to get ready for school. On the way to school, all I think about is how lucky I am to be his son. He is the person that I always look upon as a role model that one day I would become. His story inspires me in everything I do. Overall, I'm proud to be his legacy.
I don't know but my writing style works or not ... so if it goes off topic please tell me.
All advise will be appreciated... please be as strict and mean as you could. Thank you.
Long ago, for as long as I could remember, there were wars and disasters. At that time, time that people had to face difficulties struggling for their existences, an ordinary person was born into an extraordinary family of ten; each of them represented a unique power, except for "him". Being born as a normal person in such a strange family like his was not a pleasure for him; yet because of his "abnormality", he found himself a big time loser surrounded by awesome people. Despite of their superior powers, they preferred working hard as a normal family, waking up before the God of Sunset in order to begin their works on the fields of burning fire and finishing when the Sun met the Moon. Unfortunately, our main character was unable to go to school due to his poverty; despite of his young age and his ordinariness, he tended to work as hard as he could trying not to be his family's embarrassment even though no one think of him that way. At the age of nine, fortunately, Fate finally smiled with his family, by the end of Sunny season, their crops had been all sold to the God of Luck; consequently, with the money that his parents got from their beneficial business plus the countable amount of money which had been preserved for such a long time since they moved to this town, he was sent to school, and also his siblings. As the result, the fact that he was able to be acknowledged by the elders changed his live (not so much but somehow it did).
Maybe his life would be as normal as it supposed to be if he hadn't make the most daring decision of his life: moving out of his house, separated from his family, in order to find the true meaning of life and the reason why he existed. Time went by as our traveller keep going to find his destination, at last, he saw a crowded place where shocked him with its weirdness. In there, our young man realized that this place was very unfamiliar with him; he did not know whether he could live in such a chaotic place like this or not. Without any hesitations in his mind, the man began to start his new life in this new town.
At first, he tried to find a job so that he can earn for his living; the first attempt was failed. Unexpectedly, the first failure was followed by many other failures. Therefore, failing so many times had pushed him down to the hole of desperation and depression. However, he had not reached his end yet. Later then, with the helping hand from the Fairy of hope, he soon recognized that everyone had, at least once, failed in their life and even though one failed if he/she knew how to accept and take that failure as a part of his/her acknowledges process, he/she would become the wisdom; however, if not, loser he/she would be. Consequently, he stood up, kept telling to himself those words:" even if I fall, I will stand up tall", and once again tried his luck but in another way; he went to the Temple of Knowledge so that he could learn something valuable. During his training with the Master, he had to overcome many difficulties such as passing the Ocean of experiences, climbing to the top of Mt. Awareness, etc. By the time his training was accomplished, he had mastered the art of being fittest to this dramatic society. He became more mature and one more important thing need to tell about this guy was that he had found what his real powers were. They were not neither super strength nor high intelligence; they were the power of never-give-up, the power of belief, and last but not least the power of venturesome. Finally, he has succeeded with the way that he has chosen to follow.
Walking out of my dream as a hero, my father stands in front of me, waking me up and telling me to get ready for school. On the way to school, all I think about is how lucky I am to be his son. He is the person that I always look upon as a role model that one day I would become. His story inspires me in everything I do. Overall, I'm proud to be his legacy.