University of Florida essay Topic about how living with my father made me independent

Here is the Prompt: In the space provided, please write a concise narrative in which you describe a meaningful event, experience or accomplishment in your life and how it will affect your college experience or your contribution to the UF campus community. You may want to reflect on your ideas about student responsibility, academic integrity, campus citizenship or a call to service.

I am just about to write my essay and was wondering what you guys thought of my topic. As of now, I am going to write about how living with my father, who worked for most of the day, my freshman year of high school has made me independent since I basically had to do everything for myself since he wasn't around.

So...any thoughts? I was also thinking of maybe writing about a trip to the Dominican Republic (where I am from) and how seeing my father went from having nothing to having everything has served as a sort of encouragement for me...

Thanks for any feedback

Hi Keisey K. Ramirez,

I think that talking about your trip the the Dominican Republic and how your dad became successful in life which has encouraged you to do the same would be a good idea because it's unique. You just have to be sure to make it personal because that's what the admissions officers are looking for; they don't want someone who is "just like everyone else" in a sense. I'm sure it'll come out great, just also have someone proofread it and critique it to make it better.

Good luck!
Rosemari Malu :)