The University of Michigan fits every criteria for me in terms of being in the college

can someone read over this essay for the university of michigan and give me your thoughts please? heres the prompt.
Describe the unique qualities that attract you to the specific undergraduate College or School (including preferred admission and dual degree programs) to which you are applying at the University of Michigan. How would that curriculum support your interests?

I want to apply to the university of Michigan for a variety of reasons. The first is because it is a very good school that is nationally recognized for it's academics. it's one of the best schools for the major i am hoping to pursue. I hope major in business and pursue graduate studies in law. The university of Michigan has a great business and law school that i think would be ideal places to earn a degree and start a career. The Ross school of business offers students unlimited opportunities when it comes to career options. The program actively promotes action based learning and is a guarantee of professional success as shown by the high percentage of graduates who received job offers almost immediately after graduating. I am interested in pursuing graduates studies in law because i think it is a fascinating subject that can allow me to make a positive difference in people's lives. The location of the campus is also a big plus. it's one of the best college towns and offers an immersive Big university experience. After exploring the website and talking to counselors i was really drawn in by not only the quality of the education offered, but by the diverse campus life and clubs that are available. The University of Michigan is filled with students of numerous races and backgrounds and feels like a school that truly has something for everyone. The university of Michigan fits every criteria for me in terms of being the college that i want to spend the next four years at. I hope that by turning in this application, i am starting the first step in attending your prestigious university.

Hi Abdul,

Here are my suggestions:

I want to apply to the university of Michigan for a variety of reasons. The first is because it is a very good school that is nationally recognized for it's academics. it's one of the best schools for the major i am hoping to pursue. I hope major in business and pursue graduate studies in law. The university of Michigan has a great business and law school that i think would be ideal places to earn a degree and start a career

The introduction is too general, every university is well known and a good school. Try to start your essay with unique quality that intrigued you to join university. Just go through their website and try to gain as much knowledge as you can about them and then make a good start in essay. Ok you have mentioned good points about university, you may start your essay with "The program actively promotes action based learning and is a guarantee of professional success " these lines: that's what I think. Starting with university is good school and nationally recognized , best for majors ...doesn't sound so attractive to me. May be you can add them in between but try to write the first line as unique as you can. Hope this helps.

Happy new year and wish you luck :)