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University of Toronto Computer Science Supplemental Question



woodg 4 / 8  
Nov 9, 2024   #1
Briefly describe a personal goal you have set for yourself, and how long you have been working to achieve this goal. In your answer, please outline who you turned to for advice and/or help to achieve this goal, and what was their role? What did you learn about yourself? (120 words max)

I relied on dichotomous thinking - viewing solutions with a certainty that either it was "correct" or "incorrect". I felt constrained not being able to categorise a solution by either definition. In preparation for the World Robot Olympiad, my coach helped me visualise my binary approach through poly-perspectivity. Utilising knowledge ingrained by his professor - 'single-point-failure', he encouraged me to seek perspectives that initially felt counterintuitive. I learned to define problems, and rank solutions against established criteria. My mentor's guidance proved to me that solutions are not objectively set; yet constantly change. When I finally stood on the podium in Panama, embracing my silver medal, I recognized it as a small, yet powerful step in reshaping my approach.

Holt  Educational Consultant - / 15461  
Nov 10, 2024   #2
Reverse the presentation. Speak first of how you wanted to join the robot olympiad in Panama and the problem you encountered. Then proceed with the information presentation you have here. You may need to revise the presentation to suit the word count but the additional information at the start of the essay will certainly help the essay become clearer to the reviewer. Right now, you are starting the presentation in the middle, without first explaining why your mindset was such. The end result of your goal was impressive so it is just a matter of framing the response in a manner that would highlight that accomplishment at this point. Work on a better opening presentation.
sarcasticswarley 1 / 3  
Nov 24, 2024   #3
I agree with Holt, you should restructure the essay for more clarity. It comes off a bit as confusing to start with the middle but i really liked the way you closed it off.


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