PROMPT: Tell us about a personal quality, talent, accomplishment, contribution or experience that is important to you. What about this quality or accomplishment makes you proud and how does it relate to the person you are?
Immediately after school, I run as fast as I can. Luckily, I do not miss the bus, which usually arrives at 3:04. Breathing heavily, I get a seat in the back next to the window. The sun rays that penetrate the window expose various colors of light particles prismatically. Soon, the bus stops. I have arrived at my first destination. I exit the bus, press a button on a pole, and wait for the traffic light to change. Various thoughts come to my mind - 'How much homework do I have today?' 'How many hours can I sleep today?' 'How many tests do I have tomorrow?' While thinking of answers for these questions, I cross the street. It is 3:27; I'm waiting for the Orange Monster.
The Orange Monster, as I call it, is a metro bus that transports me from Glendale to my job in LA. The journey takes about an hour and a half. The bus arrives and engulfs me. Every day it goes along the same route at the same time with the same people. The shifting scenery seen through the window is constant too. The statistics homework problems that I do on the bus are the only things that change. It causes me grief that there is no alteration in my life.
When I get off of the bus at 4:24, fresh air welcomes me. I pass by the old buildings that give people waiting for the bus some shade. I finally arrive at work. By earning nine dollars an hour as a customer service worker I have learned how to handle my time efficiently to fulfill my personal objectives. I was not obsessed with time before I started working part-time six days a week. I was wasting countless hours on meaningless and empty tasks such as checking my Facebook and Twittering. Nevertheless, having a fixed schedule has taught me the value of time.
Every day I repeat the same routine: from home to school to work to home again. I leave at 6:30 A.M. and get back at 8:30 P.M. Through this repetitive fourteen-hour cycle, I have learned to manage my time effectively and have discovered to set my priorities to discipline myself to get things done on time. Time management has not only taught me how to be in control of my schedule but also to be in control of myself. Some of my friends say that I am suffering from "hurry sickness," trying to finish things as quickly as possible. They tell me to slow down and let things just flow. However, to me, time is worth more than gold; it is a force that motivates me to achieve high goals and to perfect myself. Even though my drive for time management hasn't always been smooth, the fact that I did not give up but continue to maintain this arduous routine makes me proud. As Carl Sandburg once said, "Time is the coin of your life. It is the only coin you have, and only you can determine how it will be spent".
Is my essay off topic?
I asked my teachers to revise it and one of them said it's off topic.
Well thank you for reading and please add comments about what you think!
Thanks!
P.S. are there any grammar mistakes or awkward sentences?
Immediately after school, I run as fast as I can. Luckily, I do not miss the bus, which usually arrives at 3:04. Breathing heavily, I get a seat in the back next to the window. The sun rays that penetrate the window expose various colors of light particles prismatically. Soon, the bus stops. I have arrived at my first destination. I exit the bus, press a button on a pole, and wait for the traffic light to change. Various thoughts come to my mind - 'How much homework do I have today?' 'How many hours can I sleep today?' 'How many tests do I have tomorrow?' While thinking of answers for these questions, I cross the street. It is 3:27; I'm waiting for the Orange Monster.
The Orange Monster, as I call it, is a metro bus that transports me from Glendale to my job in LA. The journey takes about an hour and a half. The bus arrives and engulfs me. Every day it goes along the same route at the same time with the same people. The shifting scenery seen through the window is constant too. The statistics homework problems that I do on the bus are the only things that change. It causes me grief that there is no alteration in my life.
When I get off of the bus at 4:24, fresh air welcomes me. I pass by the old buildings that give people waiting for the bus some shade. I finally arrive at work. By earning nine dollars an hour as a customer service worker I have learned how to handle my time efficiently to fulfill my personal objectives. I was not obsessed with time before I started working part-time six days a week. I was wasting countless hours on meaningless and empty tasks such as checking my Facebook and Twittering. Nevertheless, having a fixed schedule has taught me the value of time.
Every day I repeat the same routine: from home to school to work to home again. I leave at 6:30 A.M. and get back at 8:30 P.M. Through this repetitive fourteen-hour cycle, I have learned to manage my time effectively and have discovered to set my priorities to discipline myself to get things done on time. Time management has not only taught me how to be in control of my schedule but also to be in control of myself. Some of my friends say that I am suffering from "hurry sickness," trying to finish things as quickly as possible. They tell me to slow down and let things just flow. However, to me, time is worth more than gold; it is a force that motivates me to achieve high goals and to perfect myself. Even though my drive for time management hasn't always been smooth, the fact that I did not give up but continue to maintain this arduous routine makes me proud. As Carl Sandburg once said, "Time is the coin of your life. It is the only coin you have, and only you can determine how it will be spent".
Is my essay off topic?
I asked my teachers to revise it and one of them said it's off topic.
Well thank you for reading and please add comments about what you think!
Thanks!
P.S. are there any grammar mistakes or awkward sentences?