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"I used to hate piano" - University of Michigan-Ann Arbor Supplemental Essay!



Kasamira 5 / 12  
Nov 26, 2014   #1
If you could only do one of the activities you have listed in the Activities section of your Common Application, which one would you keep doing? Why? (Required for all applicants. Must be under 150 words)

I used to hate piano, I detested practicing, I'd "accidentally" lose my scale worksheet and whine about lessons. Then, my teacher introduced Waltz of the Flowers and I fell in love. Music was like learning a new language and I'd just experienced a culture shock. I played my keyboard for hours, practiced easy versions of Tchaikovsky until my fingers hurt, all to get my hands on the original composition. Debussy was my art, Chopin was my math, and Tchaikovsky was my literature. Each was like a cacophony of sounds, that needed hours to pick apart, and separate. Piano helped me cast off my stage fright and be bold. After changing schools it helped me make friends when I was terrified of not fitting in. It's opened doors where I could compete with others doing something I love, and has been an amazing source of motivation in my life for nearly 12 years.

SaritaM 2 / 6  
Nov 26, 2014   #2
i really love the way this is written it makes me feel your passion!
"I'd "accidentally" loose my scale worksheet and whine about lessons" Change loose to lose
"I played my keyboard for hours, practiced simplified versions of Tchaikovsky until my fingers hurt, just to get my hands on the original" I'm not sure what you mean with "just to get my hands on the original" maybe try elaborating or taking it out.

"it helped make new friends after changing schools when I was terrified of not fitting in" try rewording the sentence i had to read it twice to make more sense of it. maybe rephrase it to say "after changing schools it helped me..."
OP Kasamira 5 / 12  
Nov 26, 2014   #3
Thank you SaritaM! :) When I was talking about original Tchaikovsky I meant sheet music that was what he'd actually composed, not versions arranged by someone to make it easier to play :) I'll change it a bit... And I fixed the last part too


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