Virginia tech essay: 5 Reasons why you want to attend virginia tech

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When choosing a college to go, I have to consider thoroughly many factors, from academic to living. After scrutinizing hundreds of schools all over the United States, I finally came up with Virginia Tech. The school is felicitous for me in many aspects.

As a place to live, the town of Blacksburg is simply awesome. There are not so many places where it takes only a few steps from the modern academic environment to the beautiful, pristine forest. As a place to study, with the Internet available everywhere and a giant library, the school is definitely the first choice for people who want outstanding academic environment. Excellent students in both academic and extracurricular activities is another wonderful thing about the school. I will learn a lot from those students and try to work harder to catch up with them. Moreover, people here come from many distinctive places, so I can know a lot of different manners, beliefs and life styles in the world. I will also contribute to the cultural diversity by sharing Vietnam's perennial culture through spectacular customs and dishes. The final and most important reason is the top engineering programs. Years at will turn me from a naïve high school boy to a skillful engineer.

Even if I cannot get in, it is worth applying because the school is totally a dream place or me to go.

Hi,

Is your esssay suppose to be this short? If not, then maybe you should write a little longer one, focusing on your educational goals. Some little things that i thought were important: Maybe not write "catch up with them". You have to show them that you are competent. Maybe not mention about the internet thing because it is too trivial as a reason to transfer. Also do not mention the ranking. The admissions already know it and they don't want you to tell them that. Maybe you should explain the engineering course a bit more, you know ...talk about your passion and how their program fits with your needs. Also i think "simply awesome" is too colloquial. Try better, more formal words.

I hope that helps. Please don't be overwhelmed. Work on it with more emotion and excitement. Make it a little more personal.
Best of luck

Thanks. I am going to fix it. It is only 250 words btw. About the ranking, some people tell me i should include and some professor's name to show that i have done some reseach about the school.

I feel you need more to it. Put a little more of detail of why Blacksburg would be a great place to live. Also, it sounds very generic, like you don't know a lot about the community or how it is being a Hokie. Try and make it more personal. Best of luck to you!