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The most fascinating extracurricular activity that I have done is volunteering in 7th Asian Winter Game. I was a captain of the rescue group. First time in my life I was responsible for others. We were an exceptional group since we were related directly to Ministry of Emergency Situation. My team was responsible for games in mountains as skiing, snowboarding and etc. To prevent emergency situation, we learnt how to work in a team and to communicate with each other. The most valuable thing in the volunteering was foreseeing of sequence of events, for we were responsible for lives of others. It required to be well organized and to act in schedule. My team members also affected me. While working with them, I became more stable to criticism and understand that some accomplishments come after mistakes that taught me some key points. By the end of volunteering, I realized how is essential to work in command, for it provided me with self confidence, punctuality and leadership.
The most fascinating extracurricular activity that I have done is volunteering in 7th Asian Winter Game. I was a captain of the rescue group. First time in my life I was responsible for others. We were an exceptional group since we were related directly to Ministry of Emergency Situation. My team was responsible for games in mountains as skiing, snowboarding and etc. To prevent emergency situation, we learnt how to work in a team and to communicate with each other. The most valuable thing in the volunteering was foreseeing of sequence of events, for we were responsible for lives of others. It required to be well organized and to act in schedule. My team members also affected me. While working with them, I became more stable to criticism and understand that some accomplishments come after mistakes that taught me some key points. By the end of volunteering, I realized how is essential to work in command, for it provided me with self confidence, punctuality and leadership.