This is my essay for common apps, I know I am a horrible writer but o'well. For some reason, this essay sound kind of weird, can anyone please point out my error?
Prompt: Please briefly elaborate on one of your extracurricular activities or work experiences in the space below (150 words or fewer, 1000 character maximum).
Volunteering at the library is one of the simplest forms of volunteering available. Shelving books and checking books out pales in comparison with volunteering at the hospital or maybe the fire station. However, I have learned much from it. After several months of volunteering, my disorganized tendency was replaced by an inclination to be organized. As a result, my room is now the neatest it has been in 16 years, and my school binder looks like a catalog. From volunteering there, I have discovered much. Moby Dick became my friend; the Count of Monte Cristo taught me motives. Hamlet might as well be written in today's English, and Beowulf became the near past. I learned how to build a computer and realized why 1984 will never be 1984 (the book). Even if given the chance for a better activity, I would never relinquish this chance to learn and grow.
Thanks ;)
Prompt: Please briefly elaborate on one of your extracurricular activities or work experiences in the space below (150 words or fewer, 1000 character maximum).
Volunteering at the library is one of the simplest forms of volunteering available. Shelving books and checking books out pales in comparison with volunteering at the hospital or maybe the fire station. However, I have learned much from it. After several months of volunteering, my disorganized tendency was replaced by an inclination to be organized. As a result, my room is now the neatest it has been in 16 years, and my school binder looks like a catalog. From volunteering there, I have discovered much. Moby Dick became my friend; the Count of Monte Cristo taught me motives. Hamlet might as well be written in today's English, and Beowulf became the near past. I learned how to build a computer and realized why 1984 will never be 1984 (the book). Even if given the chance for a better activity, I would never relinquish this chance to learn and grow.
Thanks ;)