Prompt: In an essay of 300 words or less, please discuss your academic interests and/or professional goals.
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Ever since I was a child, I have always wanted to be someone who can help and improve the lives of others.Although I do not have an planned future for myself, I wish my future career could be related to the health care field that I would influence someone's life someday . My first life experience with a health care field professional was with a social worker. When my mother was diagnosed with severe depression, the social worker was the first person to approach me to give me comfort and support. My mother's sickness came extremely fast; at age 14, I felt hopeless and helpless when my mother was taken from me to be hospitalized.The social worker told me that I needed to become stronger and more independent in order to ease stresses on my family. Her words gave a sense of new direction to my helpless life. Without the social worker that cared for me, my life could have still been dejected. Her job plays a crucial role in our community, caring takers for people and making our society a better and warmer place to live. I also want to be someone like the social worker who cares and can affect somebody's life positively. My career choice would be in the health care profession because I want to make a difference in the lives of others.
Please criticize this essay harshly.Thank you :D
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Ever since I was a child, I have always wanted to be someone who can help and improve the lives of others.Although I do not have an planned future for myself, I wish my future career could be related to the health care field that I would influence someone's life someday . My first life experience with a health care field professional was with a social worker. When my mother was diagnosed with severe depression, the social worker was the first person to approach me to give me comfort and support. My mother's sickness came extremely fast; at age 14, I felt hopeless and helpless when my mother was taken from me to be hospitalized.The social worker told me that I needed to become stronger and more independent in order to ease stresses on my family. Her words gave a sense of new direction to my helpless life. Without the social worker that cared for me, my life could have still been dejected. Her job plays a crucial role in our community, caring takers for people and making our society a better and warmer place to live. I also want to be someone like the social worker who cares and can affect somebody's life positively. My career choice would be in the health care profession because I want to make a difference in the lives of others.