"Where there is a will,there is a way" - My first draft of admission essay

"Where there is a will,there is a way" sounds like a good adage which may imply to the life of most people.But it took a different way in my life , eventhough I wished to further my study in USA;was completely lost on the way of application process.Far away from home ,separated from parents and siblings,remembering the memory of the home ;troubles alot.Regardless the step heading towards the success ,it was also leaning me backward due the initiation of negative attitude that I will succeed or not.

Everyone in this world has dream which makes each one to follow the path of success, the same was case for me.Never left the home for single night made me home sick and unaware of the fast moving world.But I need to pace myself with the "time"which plays vital role in the life,so I packed my luggage and headed to the captial city.There is only one advising centre throughout the country,situated in the capital city which made me to come this place.

Being the first child to apply in the family where parents are illiterate added the thorns on my way .Next problem was the poverty;even my had no enough money to apply to single class.But they were strong adherent of the US education;made me anguished because being illiterate also they were aware of the significance of US education.Therefore I respect my parent from heart fi or showing right path in my life.

May be or not I can get success in my application process but I will always aim to get admission.So I am not depressed but eager to complete as soon as possible and return to my homecity to remove the distance of love between my family and I.Lastly I want to support the initially stated proverb because it was my dream to study in U.S. which made to travel

such far distance.

*Please do not disparage me because it was my first draft.

This is what i have edited. Just a little few spelling and grammar mistakes here and there. Gambhir Kunwar, youhave the tendency to not leave a space after a fullstop or comma, this is a bad habit which will cost you points for your grammars! Please remove this bad habit! Sorry if I overlooked any errors.

"Where there is a will,there is a way" sounds like a good adage which may imply to the life of most people.But(. But) it took a different way in my life , eventhough(even though) I wished to further my study in USA;was completely lost on the way of application process.Far away from home ,separated from parents and siblings,remembering the memory of the home ;troubles alot.Regardless the step heading towards the success ,it(, it) was also leaning me backward due the initiation of negative attitude that I will succeed or not.

Everyone in this world has dream which makes each one to follow the path of success, the same was case for me.Never left the home for single night made me home sick and unaware of the fast moving world.But(. But) I need to pace myself with the "time"which("time" which) plays vital role in the life,so I packed my luggage and headed to the captial(capital) city.There is only one advising centre throughout the country,situated(, situated) in the capital city which made me to come this place.

Being the first child to apply in the family where parents are illiterate added the thorns on my way.Next(. Next) problem was the poverty;even my had no enough money to apply to single class.But(. But) they were strong adherent of the US education;made me anguished because being illiterate also they were aware of the significance of US education.Therefore I respect my parent from heart fi (?) or showing right path in my life.

May be or not I can get success in my application process but I will always aim to get admission.So](. So) I am not depressed but eager to complete as soon as possible and return to my homecity(home city) to remove the distance of love between my family and I.Lastly(. Lastly) I want to support the initially stated proverb because it was my dream to study in U.S. which made to travel such far distance.