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'wheelchairs and blankets' - Common application elaboration on one of your activities



celestialxx 1 / -  
Sep 21, 2008   #1
In the space provided below, please elaborate on one of your activities (extracurricular, personal activities, or work experience)(150 words or fewer).

I stood by the front door, the cool autumn breeze attempting to ease my frazzled nerves. Countless pessimistic thoughts raced through my mind as I tried to fathom where I was and what I was doing there. It was my first day volunteering at the nursing home. I regret hesitating to take this opportunity for it helped me develop as a person tremendously. By simple pushing wheelchairs and distributing blankets I encountered exceptional people who gave remarkable advice on living life and setting goals for yourself. I am vastly different from the person who stood outside a door, too afraid to approach a new experience. Volunteering at the nursing home has become more than just a routine, but something that I greatly enjoy doing.

Other than grammar, anything that would help it flow better would be awesome too ^^ Maybe a rating out of 10 too? xD I'm so nervous for this application process ):

EF_Team5 - / 1583  
Sep 22, 2008   #2
Nice job. Short, to the point, not too many frivolous details.


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