this is a superrrr rough draft and it's not really for stanford, its a class assignment essay.
i dont really want to lists clubs and activities that stanford offers because it seems like everyone is doing that, so is there anyway i can take this approach but make it seem like stanford is the place for me? thanks!
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Exhausted, I sit in my chair and brainstorm. I begin to think, "I am just one person among six other billion people. I am just one person among millions of other people who are applying to Stanford. What would make Stanford a good place for me and not the other millions?"
Throughout my life I have moved around, not state to state, but from country to country. I went through the pain of moving and leaving my friends, and the fear of making new friends and fitting in. Almost all my life I have lived overseas, whether it was in Japan or Korea. I have not yet experienced the lifestyle of most American teens. Even though the DoDDS Schools try to replicate state side schools as much as possible to make it feel like home, it is still not the same. During the summers, I am able to sample a small taste and a feel of what it would be like to live in the U.S. and go to school there. I don't want a taste anymore, I want the whole thing.
The opportunity is just around the corner and I am ready to make the final leap into full independence. I am finally at the end of my High School career and the acceptance of a college will make or break this opportunity to live the lifestyle I dreamed of.
Stanford isn't just one of my colleges among a list of others. I believe Stanford is a good place for me because it'll let me be the individual that I am, and I say this because it led founder, Leland Stanford to create a prestigious universities because he wasn't able to be the individual he wanted to be at another school. Stanford's overall community, especially the clubs they offer, seems to be a tight-knit family. Being a part of the student life at Stanford will let me develop as a person and I truly look forward to that.
i dont really want to lists clubs and activities that stanford offers because it seems like everyone is doing that, so is there anyway i can take this approach but make it seem like stanford is the place for me? thanks!
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Exhausted, I sit in my chair and brainstorm. I begin to think, "I am just one person among six other billion people. I am just one person among millions of other people who are applying to Stanford. What would make Stanford a good place for me and not the other millions?"
Throughout my life I have moved around, not state to state, but from country to country. I went through the pain of moving and leaving my friends, and the fear of making new friends and fitting in. Almost all my life I have lived overseas, whether it was in Japan or Korea. I have not yet experienced the lifestyle of most American teens. Even though the DoDDS Schools try to replicate state side schools as much as possible to make it feel like home, it is still not the same. During the summers, I am able to sample a small taste and a feel of what it would be like to live in the U.S. and go to school there. I don't want a taste anymore, I want the whole thing.
The opportunity is just around the corner and I am ready to make the final leap into full independence. I am finally at the end of my High School career and the acceptance of a college will make or break this opportunity to live the lifestyle I dreamed of.
Stanford isn't just one of my colleges among a list of others. I believe Stanford is a good place for me because it'll let me be the individual that I am, and I say this because it led founder, Leland Stanford to create a prestigious universities because he wasn't able to be the individual he wanted to be at another school. Stanford's overall community, especially the clubs they offer, seems to be a tight-knit family. Being a part of the student life at Stanford will let me develop as a person and I truly look forward to that.
