I am currently writing an essay for a college fly-in at Williams College and I am a bit behind on the due date (4 days!) Any help would be appreciated, especially geared towards accuracy with topic/prompt.
Prompt: Describe your neighborhood and how it impacts who you are. Please limit your response to 300 words.
Being the only place an immigrant at the time could call home, my childhood began in a small apartment complex located a couple miles east of downtown Phoenix. The Castellana apartment complex was a mixing pot full of diversity, bringing in people from all different upbringings and cultures to create a community of families just trying to reach the American Dream. Families would group up with each other and engage in weekly activities such as attend the swap meet together, have dinner with each other, and invite each other over to watch big sporting events on one of the only TVs in the complex. Even though we were all from different backgrounds, our families worked together to make living in a new environment a lot easier. At a young age, I learned the value of community and family.
When I turned four, I moved to a suburban area of Phoenix that was still in development. The area was called "ghetto" by many Phoenicians but my family had to make a decision to somehow fit nine of us in a household. I began pre-k at an elementary school across the canal where families from different walks of life enrolled their children to receive at least some kind of education. Many students didn't attend school because they had to work with their parents to provide more income to help the family survive in a new country. These parents knew the value of education and they always reminded their children, but the truth was, the parents couldn't afford to have their children in schools because they had to help provide for their family. This is where I learned the importance of education and the privilege I had in order to find a way to give back to my community.
I want to add a bit more and I feel some areas are unneeded but I am not sure which.
Prompt: Describe your neighborhood and how it impacts who you are. Please limit your response to 300 words.
Being the only place an immigrant at the time could call home, my childhood began in a small apartment complex located a couple miles east of downtown Phoenix. The Castellana apartment complex was a mixing pot full of diversity, bringing in people from all different upbringings and cultures to create a community of families just trying to reach the American Dream. Families would group up with each other and engage in weekly activities such as attend the swap meet together, have dinner with each other, and invite each other over to watch big sporting events on one of the only TVs in the complex. Even though we were all from different backgrounds, our families worked together to make living in a new environment a lot easier. At a young age, I learned the value of community and family.
When I turned four, I moved to a suburban area of Phoenix that was still in development. The area was called "ghetto" by many Phoenicians but my family had to make a decision to somehow fit nine of us in a household. I began pre-k at an elementary school across the canal where families from different walks of life enrolled their children to receive at least some kind of education. Many students didn't attend school because they had to work with their parents to provide more income to help the family survive in a new country. These parents knew the value of education and they always reminded their children, but the truth was, the parents couldn't afford to have their children in schools because they had to help provide for their family. This is where I learned the importance of education and the privilege I had in order to find a way to give back to my community.
I want to add a bit more and I feel some areas are unneeded but I am not sure which.
