Hi, I'm new here. Can I please ask for some comments on my personal statement? Are there any parts that I have to elaborate more on? Any inappropriate sentences? Are there any weird phrasing or order of sentences? As well as grammar and spelling mistakes. Thank you so much!
You should also include a personal statement elaborating your achievements, as well as their relevance to the course of study you have chosen.
(2000 characters)
Going out of the contest room, I was excited but still unconfident of my result. This is my third time participating in national competitions on behalf of my school. The previous two attempts were in junior high school, where I took Mathematics subject. Although I am passionate about mathematics and have studied extensively, I was unable to qualify for the next rounds. I then came across programming and decided to give it a shot. From 2019 to 2020, I studied programming fundamentals and theories, as well as competing and winning medals in various informatics competitions. I found that I enjoy it. The 2021 Indonesian National Science Competition in Informatics I joined recently was my chance to prove my interest. I immediately opened the regency level winner announcement as soon as it was announced. From hundreds of initial participants, my name was listed with the other 47 winners in Jakarta. I soon learned that computing is my true calling, and I am ecstatic to pursue it further.
Getting involved in organizations has also shaped my character and transformed me into a whole different individual. In junior high school, I became a member of the committee for my school's interschool competition. When I was in senior high school, I joined the Student Council. Surprisingly, I was appointed as the treasurer which turned out to be a life-changing experience. These experiences molded my attitude, character, and abilities to the point that I decided to run for Student Council President. Despite the fact that I lost to the elected president, which made me vice president, I learned valuable communication, organizational, and leadership skills. I believe these skills are essential for my future.
NUS has the best computing school in Asia and a long list of successful alumni. My ambition is to use my expertise to help the community and to develop long-term solutions. I believe that applying to NUS will bring me closer to my objectives.
personal statement essay
You should also include a personal statement elaborating your achievements, as well as their relevance to the course of study you have chosen.
(2000 characters)
Going out of the contest room, I was excited but still unconfident of my result. This is my third time participating in national competitions on behalf of my school. The previous two attempts were in junior high school, where I took Mathematics subject. Although I am passionate about mathematics and have studied extensively, I was unable to qualify for the next rounds. I then came across programming and decided to give it a shot. From 2019 to 2020, I studied programming fundamentals and theories, as well as competing and winning medals in various informatics competitions. I found that I enjoy it. The 2021 Indonesian National Science Competition in Informatics I joined recently was my chance to prove my interest. I immediately opened the regency level winner announcement as soon as it was announced. From hundreds of initial participants, my name was listed with the other 47 winners in Jakarta. I soon learned that computing is my true calling, and I am ecstatic to pursue it further.
Getting involved in organizations has also shaped my character and transformed me into a whole different individual. In junior high school, I became a member of the committee for my school's interschool competition. When I was in senior high school, I joined the Student Council. Surprisingly, I was appointed as the treasurer which turned out to be a life-changing experience. These experiences molded my attitude, character, and abilities to the point that I decided to run for Student Council President. Despite the fact that I lost to the elected president, which made me vice president, I learned valuable communication, organizational, and leadership skills. I believe these skills are essential for my future.
NUS has the best computing school in Asia and a long list of successful alumni. My ambition is to use my expertise to help the community and to develop long-term solutions. I believe that applying to NUS will bring me closer to my objectives.
