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What do I wish for!/ What's inside the package and how do you spend your day ?



Macrusa 5 / 16  
Dec 19, 2012   #1
Would anybody take a look at this and see if it is good? Be as harsh as you like :)

A package arrives at your door. After seeing the contents you know it's going to be the best day of your life. What's inside and how do you spend your day?

I eagerly opened the box and extracted my tour guide cap, flag, and the plane ticket to the Qingjing farm in Taiwan. I looked at the velvet flag which had a picture of the foggy mountaintops that had once healed me and my family. Now I had the chance to show people this extraordinary place and teach them a life-changing lesson.

I quickly opened my laptop and meticulously read the travel diary my sister and I worked on during our last visit and extracted the most memorable attractions. The first thing listed was the Qingjing sheep farm. Although we wrote that it was "a bit filthy," the mountain climb's everlasting sunset that bonded me and my family together was worth the trouble. I remember the feeling of being a true family as we climbed the mountains and explored the shops. That day we were talking with each other and when we returned to the hotel, we enjoyed the gorgeous mountain top view from our balcony. After dinner, instead of turning on the television or playing with the laptop, we talked about our day late into the night and all of us stated that we would love to come back again.

The Qingjing farm made me realize that every day we are surrounded by the fast paced society and as we are absorbed by growing technology, we miss important things in our life. As parents work hard to make a living and as students diligently study to get into their dream college, they miss some important aspects such as teamwork and family. But I hope that with my guidance, people can slow down and examine the details in their life that they once missed. In the past I didn't have the power to teach but with this special box, I now had the chance to show people how to create bonds that can last them a lifetime.

weeyizhi /  
Dec 20, 2012   #2
I looked at the velvet flag that had a picture of the foggy mountaintops, which healed me and my family. (consider changing the word heal to something else like sow a strong bond).

I now hadhave the chance to show people how to create bonds that can last them a lifetime.
I hope you can give more about what you did, and how it changed you. Also, your title is "what do I wish for"; maybe you should explore more about your wish and how it can help others or yourself.
OP Macrusa 5 / 16  
Dec 20, 2012   #3
The prompt was very vague and asked what do we want in a package. This never really happened XD Do you think it creates a sense of my character?


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