hey everyone. This is my common app extracurricular essay. please help me improve it. i have a great passion for dance but its really hard to show in such a small word count. i think its a bit off. what do you think? Any advice is more than welcome. also, i need to reduce the word count. so any help will be appreciated. thanks in advance :)
The world is upside down. A pair of feet is all I can see from the corner of my eyes. The pain in my arms has made them numb but I refuse to give up. I slowly and carefully turn my gaze towards the mirror placed in front of me, trying my best not to lose balance. As I look at myself, I realize that I am doing it. I have done it. I have finally learned the posture of baby freeze and am now standing on my head.
Dancing has always taken me to a state of euphoria; to a state where I can connect with myself, learn who I am and remember where I come from. In every stage of my life, I have danced and I have learned more about myself through it. As a kid, I learned the classical form, which helped me understand the god I worshiped everyday without knowing of his existence. Through middle school, I learned various ethnic dances which allowed me to learn about the different ethnicities in my country, including my own. Belly dancing, which I learned by myself through repeated viewing of videos, helped me get in touch with my femininity as a girl transforming into a woman.
Today, I am learning the b-boying form which requires great strength and stamina. With my fragile figure, most had said I would not be able to do it. But as I started learning, my own strength astounded me. Yet again, this form has familiarized me with my strength and taught me to never underestimate myself.
Dance has always been a companion to me through my happiness and sorrow, pride and insecurity, physicality and spirituality and I believe it will continue introducing me to many other sides of me that I have yet to know.
The world is upside down. A pair of feet is all I can see from the corner of my eyes. The pain in my arms has made them numb but I refuse to give up. I slowly and carefully turn my gaze towards the mirror placed in front of me, trying my best not to lose balance. As I look at myself, I realize that I am doing it. I have done it. I have finally learned the posture of baby freeze and am now standing on my head.
Dancing has always taken me to a state of euphoria; to a state where I can connect with myself, learn who I am and remember where I come from. In every stage of my life, I have danced and I have learned more about myself through it. As a kid, I learned the classical form, which helped me understand the god I worshiped everyday without knowing of his existence. Through middle school, I learned various ethnic dances which allowed me to learn about the different ethnicities in my country, including my own. Belly dancing, which I learned by myself through repeated viewing of videos, helped me get in touch with my femininity as a girl transforming into a woman.
Today, I am learning the b-boying form which requires great strength and stamina. With my fragile figure, most had said I would not be able to do it. But as I started learning, my own strength astounded me. Yet again, this form has familiarized me with my strength and taught me to never underestimate myself.
Dance has always been a companion to me through my happiness and sorrow, pride and insecurity, physicality and spirituality and I believe it will continue introducing me to many other sides of me that I have yet to know.
