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When she was born, she did not cry. The nurses stared at the strange, incandescent newborn who simply opened her eyes and looked in wonder at the dull hospital room around her. Her parents named her Ellie, meaning "shining light." And she was.
When the girl turned six, she decided her light probably wasn't good enough. She tried to put out her flame, derive it of the oxygen that kept it going. She convinced herself it was water she wanted, not fire. But the light was stubbornly radiant, and did not go out.
When the girl turned twelve, the light was shaken. The once warm, glittering world grew strange and unfamiliar. Her trust in others faded. She was lost in shadows. At fifteen, clouds covered the light. Terrifying visions of darkness came to her. However, there was iridescent music that kindled sunlight in her and the clouds slowly cleared.
The girl is seventeen now, and her light shines bright. She continues to look around at the world with wonder, glowing with illuminating passion and burning with curiosity. Her name is Ellie, meaning "shining light." And she is.
shining Light
When she was born, she did not cry. The nurses stared at the strange, incandescent newborn who simply opened her eyes and looked in wonder at the dull hospital room around her. Her parents named her Ellie, meaning "shining light." And she was.
When the girl turned six, she decided her light probably wasn't good enough. She tried to put out her flame, derive it of the oxygen that kept it going. She convinced herself it was water she wanted, not fire. But the light was stubbornly radiant, and did not go out.
When the girl turned twelve, the light was shaken. The once warm, glittering world grew strange and unfamiliar. Her trust in others faded. She was lost in shadows. At fifteen, clouds covered the light. Terrifying visions of darkness came to her. However, there was iridescent music that kindled sunlight in her and the clouds slowly cleared.
The girl is seventeen now, and her light shines bright. She continues to look around at the world with wonder, glowing with illuminating passion and burning with curiosity. Her name is Ellie, meaning "shining light." And she is.