UK acid rain emissions - in millions of tones, from four different sectors between 1990 and 2007

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UK acid rain emissions

The graph below shows UK acid rain emissions, measured in millions of tones, from four different sectors between 1990 and 2007.

The line graph gives information about the amount of tones of the acid rain emissions from four various fields in the UK over a period of 17 years, starting from 1990.

It is clear that the most noticeable trend with regard the acid rain emissions in all the sectors was decreased and only the transport and communication sector remained unchanged over the period shown in which the domestic sector always stood at lower level than other ones.

In 1990, the highest point of the acid rain emissions in the chart came from the electricity, gas and water supply, which was 3.3 million tonnes. At the same time, the other industries and domestic figure were 2.1 million tonnes and 0.6 million respectively. Afterward, this three sectors were all gone down whereas the electricity, gas and water supply sector was the most sharp decrease, at 0.5 million tonnes which was lower 2.5 times than other industries but was twice as much as that of domestic in 2007.

As the data suggested, around 0.7 million tonnes of acid rain emission came from the transport and communication in 1990. Following this, this sector experienced a relatively low fluctuation and back again to its original level in 2007.

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over a period of 17 years, starting from 1990 between the year 1990 and 2007.

It is clear that the most noticeable trend with regard the acid rain emissions in all most industry sectors was decreased and only , except for the transport and communication sector remained unchanged over the period shown in which ... other ones.

Your summary overview is not changed enough to convince the examiner that you did not just cut and paste the original prompt instructions into your own writing. Brush up on your synonym words so that you can learn to use the word equivalents of the more common keywords used in the Task 1 essays. Reading a dictionary and remembering the meaning of words can help you better your vocabulary and synonym usage as pocket dictionaries often contain synonym references within the definition presentations.

The content of the summary overview should not simply mention that there are 4 fields involved in the measurement. Part of the accuracy of the presentation is the listing of these fields. That way the examiner will not be surprised when you suddenly start referring to these fields within the essay. The clarity of your summary requires this information. It directly relates to your TA and C&C scores.

Try to write between 150-190 words for this task. The idea is to stick to reporting the facts immediately, without causing too much irrelevant word usage in your essay. with 203 words, you are most likely blurring the meaning of your factual presentations. As some people would say; "Just the facts please." That is how you write the task 1 essay. Focus on the quality of the information, the grammar, and the punctuation marks. You needed to use a comma between the words 0.6 million and respectively (0.6 million, respectively).

Since this is a factual essay, the information is based on complete and precise information from the chart. Terms of uncertainty such as "relatively low" should be avoided. This is an example of irrelevant word usage in a Task 1 essay. Just the fact. Precise word references must be used. Actual measurements whenever possible. No guessing word references.

Several run-on sentences exist in your essay. Always separate your sentence information using either a comma or a period. A period being the preferred separation method for sentences within a paragraph. Remember, you need at least 3 sentences per paragraph. Single long sentences containing several thought presentations will receive severe GRA markdowns.