and other concerning preservatives
Do not add information to the presentation. Doing so alters the original content presentation and reduces the accuracy score for the restatement.
I believe that this solution can be sufficient.
The discussion instruction is not asking if you think the solution is acceptable. It is asking you to think about whether you support the solution presented by (dis)agreeing with the statement. The response format is incorrect and not applicable as a response to the original question. The response must cleary represent the keyword response to the question.
The reasoning paragraphs have not focused on the soda tax discussion alone. The alterations range from:
it is not certain that the price of the more health-beneficial products will be deducted. Therefore, inflation will assumingly take place
The second reason is so off-base, there is noway it can recieve a partial score. A partial score is all the previous paragraph will recieve. So, while this is a heavily worded essay, it will not receive a passing score. It is just too far from the discussion expectations.