AMERICA DREAM - SUMMARY TED VIDEO

for the last few years, 5 millions people have been living in this world. they all need for community and creativity to survive and then many of them in need of money to meet the needs of daily activity. In this country often a gap between rich and poor. It is in the causes of the poor are lazy to go to work, if compared to the rich women still work. Then the desire of children to pursue their ideals will be achieved with government policies like this and they deserve it such as free for education. Many people do not know about the advantages of association when the organization can make people's lives convenient because they can share about their daily lives and even in terms of the emotional soul. Then the most important thing is to establish the bonding in the family is important to connect and create great family.

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