The amount of fish and some kinds of meat consumed in a European country

fish and meat consumption

The following chart demonstrates the amount of fish and some kinds of meat consumed in a European country during the 1979 - 2004 period.

Overall, it is worth noting that the consumption of chicken witnessed an upward trend, though there was a downward one in the figure for beef, lamb and fish from 1979 to 2004.In 1979, people tended to eat beef and lamb more than chicken, but just around 1 and 10 years later, chicken respectively surpassed lamb and beef, becoming the most popular food of these 4 types.

As is illustrated by the graph, chicken consumption rose significantly over the years from less than 150 grams per person per week to roughly 250 grams, two-thirds higher than the second-popular one - beef in 2004. Meanwhile, from about 60 grams, there was a marginal drop in the amount of fish consumed to less than 50 grams, then followed by a fluctuation until 2004.

Regarding lamb, the figure experienced a plunge of about 100 grams during the years, hitting roughly 60 grams per capita by 2004. Similarly, commencing at about 210 grams, to be seen as the most-consumed food initially, the quantity of beef reached the peak of around 240 grams in the 1983 then strongly declined by just over 100 grams at the end of the period.

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The essay is over written by 18 words. The task 1 essay only needs to represent 200 words maximum due to the 20 minute writing limitation. The overwriting was caused by the incorrect trending presentation in the essay. Rather than presenting a sentence of highs and lows for comparison, an immediate discussion was presented, defeating the trending purpose of the presentation. The summary overview, on the other hand, has an incorrect format. It is a run-on sentence rather than a comprehensive information summary inclusive of the year presented, types of meat represented, and the measurement type. As such, the overwriting did not help the essay but rather, resulted in avoidable deductions instead.

Image identification in the summary is also vague, leaving the reader questioning what sort of chart was presented. The writer also made an incorrect image identification since what was presented was a line graph rather than a chart of any sort. Therefore, the summary overview is going to cause the failing mark for this essay.

In terms of grammar, you need to learn to use a proper mix of sentences which are not solely reliant on a comma for separation. You must learn to write individual sentences, using the correct simple, complex, and compound structure for each presentation. Each paragraph must also be comprised of 3-5 sentences, not compressed and long sentences. You are mistaking the aforementioned sentences for proper sentence variations of which these are not.