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The line graph illustrates the amount of fish and various types of meat consumed in European country


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May 8, 2022   #1

The consumption of fish and different kinds of meat in a European country



The line graph illustrates the amount of fish and various types of meat consumed in European country between 1979 and 2004.
Overall,it is apparent that the amount of beef,lamb and fish consumed decrease while chicken witnessed a slight increase from 1979 to 2004.
The number of beef comsumed per person started at around 220 grams followed by chicken and lamb(stood at 150 grams and nearly 150 grams) and fish(about 50 grams).

Within the first 5 years(from 1979 to mid-1984) the figures of chicken grew sightly whereas it is opposite of anothers.From mid-1984 to 2004 witnessed downward trend of fish and beef,hit the lowest point about below 50grams and 100grams per person per week.In contrast,the amount of chicken continued rose considerably and peak at over 200grams per person per week.After the decline in lamb in mid-1984,there was a fluctuation above 100grams in the early 1989 to 2004.Whereas,a significant increase of 100grams in the figures of chicken and reach a highest point of nearly 250grams per person per week in the years 2004.

In summary, people started consuming more chicken than beef and lamb and the fish consumption remained almost the same.
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May 8, 2022   #2
It is not enough to merely meet the word count in a task 1 essay. While there are ample words written, there will still be formatting deductions due to lack of clear writing references in the presentation. The writer cannot offer 2 summaries in this report. The summary is provided at the beginning, in the first paragraph, not at the end. There is also only 1 trending statement section, also in the 1st paragraph. There cannot be 2 trending references either. A task 1 essay does not require a concluding summary, which I believe the writer was trying to refer to in this essay. That is a task 2 requirement.

Bear in mind that the data presented comes from a previous report. It has already taken place.Therefore the present tense reference cannot be used anymore. All references must indicate previously reported data via past tense usage.

The essay does not meet the correct 3 paragraph requirement.The writer must learn to properly group his presentation to create the perfect 3 paragraph analysis. This is a somewhat promising start. At least the writer shows an effort to meet the task requirements. He just needs more guidance to achieve it.


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