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The amount of money for book clubs received from city council and how it affected members number



dinartika19 37 / 66  
Aug 22, 2016   #1
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The graph below shows how much money a city council gave to the book clubs over a four-year period.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

You should write at least 150 words


The graph shows the amount of money of book clubs received from city council. The graph also gave information how many book clubs members there were in the city. Overall, there were an upward trend in the number of book club member and the amount of money a city council gave to book society.

Over the four-year period, there were a slight increase in the amount of money that was given. The amount of money rose slowly from first year to the second year.There were a sharp rose in the third year and reached a peak in the same year. However, the customers number fell for the first time in the fourth year.

At the same period, the number of book club members fluctuated. The book club number declined dramatically from year one to year two. Accidentally, same as the money city council gave, the book member clubs also had a significant growth . In year four, the book number still incline rapidly and reached a peak.


  • Council Donation to Book Clubs


justivy03 - / 2265  
Aug 22, 2016   #2
Hi Atikah, below are my suggestions to your analysis.

- ... the amount of money ofthat book
- clubs received from city council.
- The graph also gave information as to how many book
- clubs members are there were in the city.
- Overall, there wereis an upward trend in the number
- of book club members and the amount of money
- a city council gave to the book society.

- Over the four-year period, there wereis a slight
- There wereis a sharp roserise in the third year
- However, for the first time in four years the customers number fell for the first time in the fourth year .

- Accidentally, sameFortunately, as the money that the city council gave rise ,
- In year four, the book number still incline rapidly and reached a peak.- this part of the analysis is somehow missing a point or a figure, it rose to? or peaked at what number? Please clarify.

There you have it Atikah, I hope the above remarks help you in revising your analysis.


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