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Apparent differences between populations in Yemen and Italy - IELTS Task 1



wulanbila16 14 / 7  
Mar 19, 2016   #1
The pie charts illustrate the percentages of Yemen and Italy population categorized based on the ages in 2000 and its prediction in 2050. Overall, it can be seen that almost all period of time in both countries are dominated by adults.

Turning to more detail analysis, the percentage of Yemen adults in 2000 was 46.3 percent and will increase by 11 percent in 2050. However, these numbers are lower than that of Italy. In 2000, Italy had 61.6 percent adults and, unfortunately, it will decrease dramatically to 46.2 percent. Another category, 0-14 year old, in Yemen are more than that in Italy. In contrast, the percentages of old people in Yemen are less than that in Italy. Yemen had 50.1 percent children in 2000 and this number will fall steadily to 37. The percentage of old people in this country will rise smoothly from 3.6 to 5.7 percent that are the least percentages of Yemen population. Meanwhile, the children population of Italy will decrease from 14.3 to 115 percent which are the least population of this country. Finally, Italy had 24.1 percent old people in 2000 and will rise to 42.3 percent in 2050.


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justivy03 - / 2265  
Mar 22, 2016   #2
Hi Dwi, I see that you have a few remarks on your essay already and I wish to add a little more, kindly find my corrections below;

- The pie charts illustrate the percentages of
- Yemen and Italy's population
- categorized based on the ages in 2000
- in all period of time

- Turning to a more detailed analysis,
- In contrastOn the contrary ,
- the percentages of old
- least of the population of this country.

Dwi, I suggest when you rewrite your essay, use the symbol of the percentage (%) when referring to the numbers from the pie chart. This will help formalize your analysis and will also draw a uniform format on your essay. I hope this is useful.


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