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IELTS :How apple is canned? 'durable before it is bought'



Eva Novita Sari 47 / 67  
Apr 18, 2014   #1
The diagram shows how apple is canned.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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Answer:
The diagram shows how fresh apple is canned and it gives information about process to make canned fruit from apple.

Generally, apple is fresh fruit that can be saved by using a variety of way. So, company makes canned from apple for durable and apple can be directly consumed by the society without having to wash it again and ready to eat.

Firstly, apple is picked from trees by hand. It is then transported to the cannery by large trucks. After that, apple is washed with using clean water and it is selected good quality and that is not good removed. The good quality apple is put in cold storing. Then, apple is weighed / graded. After this the apple is peeled and cores are removed. Thus, apple is corned becoming a small part.

Secondly, Apple is ready canned by using bottle and it is sealed. Then, it is cooked over heat to ensure that the cans are sterilized. After that, cans are labeled when label is attached and placed into storage. So, the canned of apple is ready to despatched to be sold to market or it can be imported to other countries.

Overall, process is making canned apple that has many steps for getting good product. As a result, it can be durable before it is bought by consumer.


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upinipin 32 / 48  
Apr 18, 2014   #2
company makes canned

what kinds of company? is it factory or what?
i think you should detail to explain it.
dumi 1 / 6793  
Apr 22, 2014   #3
Generally, apple is fresh fruit that can be saved by using a variety of way.

These are not relevant stuff for reporting what you observe in the diagram. In this task, you should limit your writing to report things that the diagram presents as this task is aimed at assessing your report writing skills. So, avoid including things that are not presented in the diagram. IELTS TASK 2 is for essay writing in which you enjoy more freedom to express your opinions. However, in this task, you need to report your observations in a logical sequence.


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