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TOEFL - automobiles have changed our lives



shreyansh13 3 / 4  
Jun 27, 2014   #1
Choose one of the following transportation vehicles and explain why you think it has changed people's lives.

Automobiles

Bicycles

Airplanes


In my personal view automobiles are the ones that have brought have a new era of transportation. It's because of them that our lives have become so simple and blistering. They have brought a significant and rapid progress in our lives. You want to go to a place; just hop into a car or bus and you can reach at your destination in no time. It has made our travel time shorter promoting its value as a substantial alternative. It is also convenient as it saves you from steaming hard work that you would have to do without it. In this modern world automobile has become necessary thing and in a family each person will have their own vehicle. No one wants to depend on others. Not only in big cities or metropolitan cities but also in urban and rural areas this culture has developed. We cannot deny the fact that it has reformed our means of communication. In earlier days, people used to travel by means of trained animals which was a tedious job as you cannot push them beyond their capableness. But with the evolution of technology, the means of transportation has reached a new prominence. Now we have automobiles running on different kind of fuels which gives them a steep advantage over other vehicles.

With the advancement in technology automobiles have also accomplished a variety of reconstruction. Several kind of vehicles are now available comprising of cars, buses, trucks etc. and people are lavish to use any of them depending upon their requirement. Nonetheless, automobiles provide us with more alternatives of entertainment. People owing cars can travel anywhere without any worry because it has become quiet convenient for them. The invention of automobile has really been a boon for us. Some might complain about its effect on environment or the crowdedness it has accrued but no one can ignore its usefulness. It has been accepted as a part of our life now.

eddies [Contributor] 25 / 1170  
Jun 27, 2014   #2
Notes:
1. For introduction, your task is to show a background information related to the topic given. Then, write a strong thesis statement. Build the bodies of paragraph with a topic sentence + a real example as to support the topic sentence. Make sure you combine the sentence between simple and compound-complex sentences. By doing this, you will earn a good score.

2. Your layout shows whole of your essay. If the layout is difficult to read, which is let's say: no spaces between paragraphs, then readers immediately think your writing needs more work to read. I suggest you to leave one space every time you open a new paragraph.

3. Tips for commas: read one of your sentences aloud and see where you would naturally pause, where you would draw a breath. If it's a short pause, like that just was, you probably need a comma.
dumi 1 / 6795  
Jul 20, 2014   #3
In my personal view automobiles are the ones that have brought have a new era of transportation.
Yes... I can see eddies has provide you some great advice. You certainly need to work on your approach for this task. You need to have paragraphs separated and they should include an introduction, body paragraphs (at least two) and a conclusion. Visit our TOEFL and IELTS essays and you would get a good understanding as to how you should construct your essay.


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