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The bar chart below shows transport preferences among young people in 4 countries in a single year.


vankhanh17 1 / -  
Oct 16, 2021   #1

the most favored type of transportation



The bar chart illustrates the percentage of transport preference in young generation in the US, UK, France and Italy in a single year.

Overall, the most favored type of transportation in most countries is car, except France. Also of note is that the proportion of young Italy people who preferred car in this year is highest, and Italy also record widest gap among the figures for motorcycle and two other vehicles.

Regarding Italy, while the proportion of car preference was nearly 75% in the year, the figures for motorcycle were significantly lower, at about 8% and 10%, respectively .

Turning to to US and UK, these countries had the same percentage of people who were in favored of car (60%). The lowest figure for this kind of vehicle was found in France, at only 40%. However, out of the four countries , the percentage of young people preferring biking was noticeably higher in this countries , reflecting that young generation here are more likely to become environmentally - conscious .



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Oct 17, 2021   #2
Where a single image is presented for review, this automatically uses a 3 paragraph format. This is due to the brief number of reporting possibilities from the image. A 4 paragraph presentation is used when 2 or more images are present. Each paragraph needs to have 3 sentences at least. The report format is off for this report. A single sentence is definitely not representative of a paragraph. It is the overstretchinof information to incorrectly create 4 paragraphs that resulted in an improperly focused report presentation. Only the last paragraph in this presentation meets the necessary paragraph requirements. Focus on proper formatting next time rather than discussion stretching for the wrong reasons.
ehetenandaiyo 2 / 1  
Oct 17, 2021   #3
I would like to suggest some changes regarding the word choices and grammar structure to your essay.

... should be "Except for France". "Also of note is that" can be replaced by "Notably". "Italy also record widest gap..." should be changed to "The widest gap was recorded in Italy".


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