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Barcelona (where would you like to travel and why)

ghafarimahsa 15 / 41  
Jul 10, 2011   #1
Barcelona is my favorite city that I would like to travel to. This city is best place for tourism because of its monument, climate and soccer.

First and foremost, Barcelona can be described as an ancient city in Spain, rich in civilization. There are lots of memorials in its museum, covering the most of the historic events. You can enjoy its monuments too. Barcelona has been well-known by its historic buildings. There are lots of eye-catching structures visible throughout the city. Many famous architects have displayed their abilities by developing amazing buildings and make it be one of the most interesting cities for tourism interested in monuments like me.

Second, Barcelona enjoys a Mediterranean climate with mild- cool winter and warm summer suitable for sunbathing. It has several beaches around the city. Snowfalls are not prevalent in the city but those are common on the outskirts of the city. its humid weather is so pleasant and often producing no rain. It is a sunny city and suitable for me to travel.

Last but not least, Barcelona has a long sporting tradition specially soccer. FC Barcelona is a sport club best known worldwide for its soccer team and I am one of its dedicated fans. Messi, who is chosen as the best soccer player in the world, is playing in this team. "camp nou" is FC Barcelona stadium and lots of matches will be held in there every year. Being in "camp nou" and seeing my favorite player is one of my dreams that can be achieved by traveling to Barcelona.

Hope I will get enough money for traveling to Barcelona and reach one of my dreams. Then I will actually write another essay about my experiences on the trip.
Alisha123 9 / 18  
Jul 10, 2011   #2
instead reach u can write fulfil..

overall u have nicely explained ur experience of trip.

u can say ---- is one of my favorite cities

who are interested in monuments ...

well done
OP ghafarimahsa 15 / 41  
Jul 10, 2011   #3
Alisha, Thanks for your suggestion.
EF_Kevin 8 / 13,321 129  
Jul 14, 2011   #4
But I have a question, why should I replace "specially" with "specifically"

I think the best thing to do is write "especially" instead.

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