Many people have learned a foreign language in their own country; others have learned a foreign language in the country in which it is spoken. Which is better? Give the advantages of each and support your viewpoint.
Nowadays, some people tend to invest in their own potential by improving and exploiting their capacity, And learning a foreign language is a sort of such investment. But unfortunently, the opportunity to learn a language in the country it is spoken in is not allways available for the ones who hope to get it, So, people who have got this chance are lucky.
Despite the obstacles ...
Nowadays, some people tend to invest in their own potential by improving and exploiting their capacity, And learning a foreign language is a sort of such investment. But unfortunentlyunfortunately , the opportunity to learn a language in the country it is spoken in is not allways always available for the ones who hope to get it, So, people who have got this chance are lucky.
I think you need to improve this introduction I don't see a thesis statement...you need to answer the question given in the thesis.
Despite the obstacles of living in a foreign country, this experience is diverse helpful ?? in learning the language. For example, living in the society will expand the background about the culture and that in turn is easing ( try to use parallel structures )a lot of linguistic problems. Moreover, there is a better chance to learn formal language as well as street language like idioms and slang. In addition, even outside classes the daily life forces the learner to exercise speaking and understanding which accelerates the learn and tightens up the time needed for learning.
However, for those who haven't got through this experience there are still some advantages for of learning a foreign language in their own country, .For instance, it may coastcost much less than living in an other country rather than maintain off going through the difficulties of being in a different community (try to make it more clear).
Thus, there is no comparison between the two conditions. After all, learning a foreign language in your own country might be the right choice in a few cases like if you take it as a hobby.
(this should be another paragraph,your conclusion, and i think you need to improve it, maybe write more sentences explaining the counterpart position and then you express your opinion) :)
Thank U babyevy for your helpful comments. I think I need to work harder on improving my essays.
Yep, at this point in your practice, Nohna, I think you should use sentences that are not too long and not too complicated. That way, you will be able to build a strong foundation for your English writing.
Despite the obstacles of living in a foreign country, this experience is diverse helpful?? --- I don't know what you are trying to say here. Maybe you are trying to say this:
Despite the obstacles of living in a foreign country, this experience of the culture is helpful in learning the language of that culture. For example, living in an English-speaking society will expand the background about the culture and that in turn is influencing the development of language.
Thus, there is no comparison between the two conditions. After all, learning a foreign language in your own country might be the right choice in a few cases like if you take it as a hobby, but immersion in the county where the language is spoken is the fastest way to learn.
:-)