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Benefit of supermarket and how it affects on small buisness



rozha 15 / 34  
Jul 11, 2013   #1
Nowadays, supermarkets are an integral part of modern-life. The corner shop are being squeezed out of the market by supermarkets and large rivals, shopping become a part of our everyday life, we can fit shopping in to our busy schedules we are not even restricted by opening hours, so many supermarkets now open twenty four hours. The price of a lot of product is very low, and the competition of the supermarkets is very good for customers. It is a very convenient way of shopping because you can choose the product you want form a large range and you have the possibility to get to know the new products. You are served in a very polite way no one makes you hurry and an adjacent car park where you can wheel your trolley to your car. A part from goods you can find there a restaurant ,cafe and , a special place for kids to play while their mothers are shopping. we will not forget that some time there is a sales and specials offers "buy one get one free" ,Beside these advantages of supermarkets it has some disadvantages for example, sometimes we buy unnecessary things, we buy things that we did not plan to buy earlier. This is called impulsive buying. For many of us the major disadvantage of shopping in the supermarkets is that it is time consuming it takes a while to get there and back.

Big stores are also quite dangerous for all small shops owned by private people. And those shops may be the only source of living of them. Those people that living away from cities center it is difficult to do shopping in the supermarkets daily , some of them they do not have car, so the small shops are very important specially at edge of the cities and sometime in the cities center for example , when you are hurry you need a thing you can buy it in a corner shop near your house you do not need to use your car.

In conclusion., supermarkets and small shops both of them have a great role in our daily life, each of us need both of them, government should have such a good plan to protect the large and small businesses in a good economical standard.

OP rozha 15 / 34  
Jul 11, 2013   #2
rozha
Big stores are also quite dangerous for all small shops owned by people privately. And those shops may be the only source of living of them. Those people that living away from city center it is difficult to shop in daily bases , some of them they do not have a car, so the small shops are very important specially at the edge of the cities and sometime in the city center for instance, the corner shops are useful as most of the time you do not need to use your a car to go around your house to buy a thing or two.
dumi 1 / 6793  
Jul 11, 2013   #3
The corner shops are being squeezed out of the market by supermarkets and large rivals, shopping become a part of our everyday life, we can fit shopping in to our busy schedules we are not even restricted by opening hours, so many supermarkets now open twenty four hours.

.... what's the link between the first section (corner shop being squeezed...) and the shopping habit? You should have taken the second idea into a new sentence. This line is anyway too long.

I have a few concerns with regard to your essay structure. Your introduction seems to be too long and you do have only one body paragraph...

Also, what's the purpose of this writing? I guess this is for TOEFL as I find one of your other threads is for that. Always, better mention the purpose and include your prompt so that others are able to provide you with more relevant comments. Another thing - please post this type of essays into "Writing Feedback" Forum.
OP rozha 15 / 34  
Jul 12, 2013   #4
In conclusion., supermarkets and small shops collectively have a great role in our daily life, government should have such a good plan to protect the large and small businesses in a good economical standard.


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