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The Best Eco-Friendly Form of Mode Transportation



mujahid_fadli 16 / 3  
Oct 11, 2015   #1
The table shows the percentage of employee which is going to work by four shapes of mode transportation in Houston, Texas; and the line chart experiences the amount of CO2 which is resulted as its residual gas and it is measured by kilogram per person per kilometer.

Car-driver only (48) and train/bus (37) take the first and second higher position in the percentage of travelers. Both of these numbers is almost similarly to the average age of the traveler.

There are two main trends in the number of output CO2 emissions. The first group to be the both of cars. While those have emissions more than 0.05 kilograms, car (driver only) produce over three times more than car (four people). The last group is bus/train and cycle/work. They virtually succeed to create zero emissions.

Overall, while car (driver only) has dominated in the percentage of daily worker in the number of, train/bus becoming stand at the first rank of the average of traveler. It can be seen that, person which is going to work by car-driver only producing the highest CO2 emissions.


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shintacandrade 10 / 66  
Oct 11, 2015   #2
Hi Fadli,

The table shows the percentage of employee (1) which is going to work by four shapes of mode transportation in Houston, Texas; and (2) the line chart experiences the amount of CO2 which is resulted as its residual gas and it is measured by kilogram per person per kilometer.

1. 'employee' is categorized as a countable noun. Here, you have some options to write this correctly: an employee OR employees. The usage of articles is a bit tricky, but what you should remember is every singular, countable noun in English must have an article or a determiner. In contrary, plurals can go without that one.

2. As you did in this essay, 'semicolon' is used to connect two independent clauses. If you have a semicolon, do not use it with conjunctions fanboys (for, and, but, or, yet, so).

Let me try to rewrite this:
The table shows the percentage of employees commuting to work and their average age in Houston, Texas; the bar chart gives the information about how much emission from each category of transport used.

Hope this helps ~ Shinta


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