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IELTS TASK 1 : Changes of mode transportation using in UK


SHanafi 120 / 415 93  
Apr 24, 2014   #1
The table below gives information about changes in modes of travel in England between 1985 and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

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The table presents the data concerning the alteration in various means of transport in UK during a particular year from 1985 to 2000.

Overall, the overall average distance travelled by all transportation types increased markedly while car stance as the most popular vehicles using by England people in the given period.

As per information, English's people travelled by car which reckoned for over 300 miles per person per annum in 1985, the number then rose sharply to the average 4800 miles in the following 15 years. Capturing an average increase by 77 miles, train coming second popularity. Similarly, in terms of long distances gained by bus and taxi depicted in increase to nearly threefold each during the statistics. However, a rose by more than a hundred miles showed in the other mode of transportation un-mentioning specifically in the tables.

Striking contrast, local bus using fell from 429 miles in 1985 to 274 miles in 2000, noted as the greatest degradation. Also, in year 2000, the average people walked and cycled less than that of the formerly did in the beginning, reaching 237 miles and 41 miles respectively.




Pahan 1 / 1,906 553  
Apr 24, 2014   #2
The table presents the data concerning the alteration inabout different ] various means of transport transportation modes used in UK during a particularthe year fromin 1985 toand 2000.

You have made an error when giving the time - Your table does not provide information from 1985 to 2000, instead it gives figures for 1985 and 2000. Those are very important points in reporting as you need to report facts as accurately as they are presented in the image.
OP SHanafi 120 / 415 93  
Apr 24, 2014   #3
Your table does not provide information from 1985 to 2000, instead it gives figures for 1985 and 2000. Those are very important points in reporting as you need to report facts as accurately as they are presented in the image.

Hmm I see, the table compare two years, means it not reports the changes in the length of time gradually.
Thank you Pahan. Please keep correct my practice writing as my exam date come closer :D
tiaDS 73 / 235 52  
Apr 29, 2014   #4
Hello SHanafi,

Perhaps we can divide the means of transport to be two categories;
1. private transport (bicycle, car)
2. public transport (local bus, long distance bus, train, taxi)
however, walking and other become the other choice.

A key point in IELTS task 1 is how we can analyze the differences and the sameness of two distinct subjects and we have to adopt the comparison and contrast pharagraph in essay.
dumi 1 / 6,925 1592  
Apr 29, 2014   #5
You have made an error when giving the time - Your table does not provide information from 1985 to 2000, instead it gives figures for 1985 and 2000. Those are very important points in reporting as you need to report facts as accurately as they are presented in the image.

This is a very important aspect in report writing. You should not make any errors when interpreting data, trends and other information. Accuracy of data in reporting is one of the most important aspects in this task. Be careful!

Striking contrast, local bus using fell from 429 miles in 1985 to 274 miles in 2000, noted as the greatest degradation.

You need to adopt a tone which is more appropriate for reporting facts;
The long distance buses have recorded a decline form 429 miles in 1985 to 274 mile in 2000.


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