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It is better for children to grow up in big cities rather than in a countryside - more opportunities



abigail anderson 1 / 1  
Mar 12, 2016   #1
Human beings, in their nature, are created different. They think, feel, and act in several ways, each one in his manner. Even their choices of life are unlike and that clearly reflect their distinction. Some people prefer to live in large cities and others enjoy the simplicity of small countries' life. However , nowadays, many people consider that rising their children in a big city is more better than in the countryside for many reasons.

First of all, recently, it is remarkable that high rates of people are moving from their villages to live in big cities where their children would have the opportunity to be connected with others. Large cities, generally, are known for tolerance of diversity, and once children get involved with people who belong to different social groups, they will be more flexible. Living with people who have different way of thinking helps children consider others' variance, know how to treat people who are surrounding them in a respectable way, and be taught going beyond their own selfish needs and sharing in the joy and sorrow of others. Besides being open-minded, children grow up well educated and having an independence of thinking. In contrast, living in small towns limits and restricts the children's improvement.

Furthermore, life in developed countries absolutely opens the window to infants to discover the world they live in. it gives them the chance to be in touch with the latest developments. As well as it is better for children, wherever they live, to be aware of the new achievements and how to use the new technologies at early age because will become more creative and productive. As a result, these children ultimately can contribute in improving the world they live in.

In the other hand, large cities offer many entertainments where children are able to relax. Parents can take their children to theatres, gardens and zoos to enjoy, play and pass time pleasantly. Moreover, many supermarkets and big shops, which cannot be found in small towns, are available in such cities. Then, that fun and amusement help children turn full of energy.

In conclusion, parents had better put their infants in a world that support them to rise more mature, stronger, wiser and more responsible. Big cities provide all the possibilities to children to prosper, be happy and succeed in life.

adrian21 15 / 17  
Mar 13, 2016   #2
Hello abigail
Let me give my opinion about your essay

Make corrections on some sentences to make it better.
Human beings, in their nature, are created different --> Humans are created differently by nature.
each one in his manner --> depend on their own
Even their choices of life are unlike and that clearly reflect their distinction --> Even their choices of life are unlike and reflected their distinction

Some people prefer to live in large cities and others enjoy the simplicity of small countries' life --> Some people prefer to live in large cities, while others enjoy the simplicity of smaller town

However, nowadays, many people consider ... --> However, for some reasons, many people nowadays consider to raise their children in a big city rather than in the countryside

Thank you
hanimps97 3 / 4  
Mar 14, 2016   #3
hello abigail, let me comment your essay.
In the introduction, I conclude you more explain in the way you write with your mother tongue and translated into english.
this paraphrase perhaps will help you to make variation in your introduction.

There is no humans which are created the same. They have their own way for choosing various perspectives and acts. Sometimes, the fact one is the way of life which they choose is divergent with the others as well as when they consider a place to live. Some individuals prefer to live in major city with numerous facilities on it while the others more savor with the peacefulness of small city. However, as is observed, there is a tendency for public to grow their children in a big city instead of countryside for some reasons.


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