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Should children grow up in the countryside or in the city?


minhvupt 3 / 2 1  
Jul 20, 2013   #1
The countryside and the city are two different environments. Each of it has positive effect and negative effect. Should children grow up in the countryside or in the city is a matter of balancing pros and cons. In my opinion, the countryside has more advantageous than the city so that it would better if children grow up in the countryside.

Firstly, air pollution, noise pollution; water pollution seems to be not often appearing in the country. Obviously, not man but wants to living in this poisonous environment. Not only children but also everyone will feel more comfortable when they live in a natural place, enjoying fresh air. Children may sense healthier and happier than children living in the city because these pollution may affect on their brain making children always under tired and upset condition. Therefore, the heavily poisonous is never a good condition for children to develop.

Secondly, life in the countryside is often arduous. Evidently, children can learn how to earn for their living which makes them more mature than children living in the city who are just depended on their parent. Children living in the countryside are always resourceful and painstaking children. Thanks to difficult and poor condition the countryside serves, they always stand on their own feet and earn their own living. Obviously, they will understand the miserable of their parent and make it a motivation of learning. Consequently, the countryside is a most suitable condition for children.

However, there are always good and bad consequences between the countryside and the city. The countryside is always lack of a number of services. Education, medical requirement for instance. As a result, not every children have enough commercial condition to go to school, they often decide to leave school at the age of which they really need education in order to make money for their family. It is a painful truth.

In conclusion ...

dumi 1 / 6,928 1592  
Jul 20, 2013   #2
Hi
First, I want to request you to post these essays into Writing Feedback forum. Also, it's better if you could mention the purpose in the "Subject" along with the topic (For e.g. TOEFL, IELTS etc.) Then include your prompt too in your essay so that others know better what it wants from you and align their comments accordingly.

Each of it has positive effect and negative effect.

Each of it has its own positives and negatives.

In my opinion, the countryside has more advantageousadvantages than the city so that it would better if children grow up in the countryside.

Living in countryside is more advantageous than living in the city.
The countryside has more advantages than what city has got to offer.
Pahan 1 / 1,906 553  
Jul 21, 2013   #3
Firstly, air pollution, noise pollution; water pollution seems to be not often appearing in the country

First, pollution of all forms such as air, noise and water, do not affect the country side the way they do affect the city.

Obviously, notno man but wants to livinglive in this poisonous environment.

Obviously, not man but wants to living in this poisonous environment. Not only children but also everyone will feel more comfortable when they live in a natural place, enjoying fresh air. Children may sense healthier and happier than children living in the city because these pollution may affect on their brain making children always under tired and upset condition. Therefore, the heavily poisonous is never a good condition for children to develop.

.... you keep talking about the negatives of pollution, but do not give a proper example for your primary reason that you cited. Your reason is that countryside is less polluted and city is more. So, give an example to show this contrast.


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