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Which is better - working at office or from home?



pankration 1 / 1  
Feb 18, 2013   #1
Working at office was better than at home.Although,working at home have some good conditions,such as comfortable or convenience,but working at home was not a better choice for people who was employee but boss.

For employee,working at office enable them entered a ideal environment to work.The company office equipment was professional,for example,computer and fax even telephone,those maybe owned at home all,but it might was not suitable to work,the computer want to play video games specially,the telephone have more functions and distract focus of people.However,by professional person equip those equipments can improve efficiency of office work.

Another advantage of working at office is that the people could have more chance to accept fresh air.Like time they go to company or back to home,they maybe use by buses,cars or bicycles,but whatever they used,they need to out their house and cannot out of breath.So,they could refreshing by fresh air and have a pleasant mood for work.

Expect that above all,working at office could be made more friends for people.For example,if other department's officer have some things that about work and involved one person,the officer would to communicate with that person,and after this,they might be became good friends,because they were pleasant during interaction.

Although working at home maybe a couple of advantage,but working at office was far outweigh it,working at office,the people can have a ideal environment to work and more chance to accept fresh air,in addition,they could make more friends.

dumi 1 / 6793  
Feb 18, 2013   #2
Working at office wasis better than at home.

.... Write in present tense as this is a current argument.

Although,working at home have some good conditionsbenefits ,such as comfortablecomfort andor convenience,but working at home wasis not a better choice for people who wasare employeesbut boss .

... you cannot have "although" and "but " both :(
Also this sentence is poorly constructed. It has many issues; grammar, inappropriate vocabulary, clarity etc. Try to write short sentences and have one idea per sentence. That helps you to improve clarity and a smooth flow of your ideas. This is my suggestion;

There is no doubt that working from home has many benefits in terms of comfort, flexibility and convenience. However, in my view, woriking in an office environment is the best for professionals.

For employees(no comma) working at office enable them entered ahave an ideal environment to work

You need to pay lots of attention to grammar, vocabulary and sentence construction. My advice is to read good essays you find here. They help you grab some sentence structures. :)

Keep posting your essays and we would help you to improve :)


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