IELTS Summary 2: Bird Migration
In life, there is a kind of situation brings us to make an alteration. The same thing as what the bird follows through in its life. The bird migrates from the breeding ground to the other area for the rest of the left season.
Birds migrate in two kinds of forms, across latitudes and altitudes. When birds migrate across the latitudes, they travel head off higher latitudes to lower latitudes. Subsequently, in the term of birds migrate across altitudes, the phenomenon shows birds alight from higher to lower altitudes.
Birds navigate the location by looking at the nature cues. At the time birds migrate, they also exert their body fat to fuel this remarkable escapade. Thus, this bird's movement always overawed observers for centuries.
I have already read your work. Let me give yours some suggestions about it. From the first sentence, there is the serious problem because your sentence is incomplete. it means there is one subject (a kind of situation), but it has two verb (is and bring). it also happened in the following sentence. for the others sentences, in my point of view, they are good enough. probably, you should increase your language in use how to utilize the collocations correctly.
Hii dills ..that is nice in your essay but i have a bit advices about how to use other and another
For example : i want to look at other people /areas /
I want look at another human /area
After Another has to be added singular
Other has to be added plural
Hoping helps thanks
You have a good summary
I have some corrections
... the bird follows through inits it is life. The bird migrates from the breeding ground to the other area for the rest of the left season.
At the time birds
migrate migration, they also (...) fuel this remarkable escapade journey.
... observers for centuries.
Maybe there are some sentences not clear.
You can added an introduction for the first sentence.
You can also put conjuction in the first sentence.
Hi! Here some advice for you:
there is a kind of situation should be
there is kind of situation
Be careful of subject and verb!
In life, there is a kind of situation
brings us to make an alteration should be
In life, there is kind of situation brought/lead/that brings us to make an alteration
Hi dils. Here I left you some comment.
To make your words unrepetitive, you can try to use paraphrase method.
.... what the bird follows through
init is life.
... to the other area for the rest of the left season .
Birds migrate in two kinds of forms(please check it would be plural or singular first. it should be: in two kinds of form) across latitudes and altitudes.
When birds migrate across the latitudes , In the first form , they travel head off ...
in the term of birds migrate across altitudes , In the later one , the phenomenon shows birds alight ...==> you have to pay attention to use the efficient word first
time birds migrateperiod of migration bird , they also exert their body fat to fuel ...
this bird'stheir movement always overawed ...
hi dils ,there is some advices of me to you such as like a grammatical error correction :
body fat ,it should be fat body
because the place of noun after adjective