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Many birds migrating very long distances to breed and feed their youngsters


BAMS14 18 / 29  
Sep 14, 2016   #1
summarys task 2 migration bird

Many bird migration regularly which fascinating observer. Types of migration are different each other, many bird migration to breeding and feeding their young, they travel in breeding season and returning in non breeding period. Many types bird traveling, nocturnal species traveling at night seem to take their navigation cues from the star, while diurnal species traveling during at the day, take their cues from location of the sun.During migration many birds fly to find out nest to provide feeding their young and rise it, for example bar-tailed godwit birds flight non stop over 11,000 miles from alaska to new zealand.

akbarmappiare 31 / 469 275  
Sep 15, 2016   #2
Hi Bams.
These are my thoughts for finalizing your summary


Many bird migration regularly which fascinating observer

where is your main verb? Mr. Bams, you are supposed to remember that each sentence has to have one main verb.

Types of migration are different each other, many bird ...

This is messy enough. You have to keep the meaning of original resource.
THERE ARE TWO DIFFERENT TYPES OF THE MIGRATION, THE TIME FOR BREEDING AND FEEDING NESTLINGS.

Many

Avoid repetition. For MANY, you can use (a large number of, a great number of, plenty of ). Make it variation.

Bams, you should review more and more your summary before you upload to make what you mind is what you mind. Sometimes, I cannot get the point of your summary

keep spirit
GOOD LUCK
dils 20 / 33 2  
Sep 15, 2016   #3
Hi, BAMS14

As a read your summary, here I give you some suggestions.

1. "Many bird migrationregularly which fascinating observer."
"Many" refers to plural, so it should be "many bird migrations".

2. "Types of migration are different each other, ..."

3. "...many bird migration to breeding and feeding their young....". I suggest this form, "...many birds migrate to breed and feed their young..."

4. "Types of migration are different each other, many bird migration to ..." This is a little bit too long for one sentence, you can divide this one sentence into two to avoid being confused with the idea that you want to reveal.

5. As possible as you can, avoid the repetitions. You may use the other words to enrich your essay.

6. Notice that you need to put the conclusion or closing statement of what you are writing.

7. Please pay attention to how each sentence flow so all the passage easy to understand and the readers got your points.


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