Too many words for IELTS task 2! (356 words)
You probably won't be able to finish it in the real exam.
Try to keep it under 270 words, make it simpler...
...we all know that books are the oldest way to transfer information from one person to another. Many many years ago people identified that if they wanted to share or store their knowledge, experiences..., writing down would be the best way. And now, we have millions of useful book from previous generations to help us improve knowledge.
In the past, the main purpose of TV is supply news and make people relax. But now it is increasingly commercialized, there are too many advertisements and many programmers are not suitable for children. To solve this problem many special channels are created, for examples: BBC news, HBO, discovery channel...
I think these sentences state the facts about books and TV, not really about they're dis/advantages.You have all the points to write about each media, you can list them like this:Books:
millions of useful book from previous generations
finding the suitable book is not easy
books always take people so much time to read
books also cannot meet people demand in timeRadio:
appropriate supplement for books
extremely appropriate for busy person
people just hear so it may be not clear and difficult to understand.TV:
informed to viewers quickly
offers both picture and sound lively
people become more lazy to search for information
the influence of TV to children is bad than goodThen elaborate each points so that you won't write stuff that are irrelevant.
Hope this helps!
I can't help you with grammar, though, because I'm not a native speaker and I'm afraid I'll make mistakes...