Unanswered [2] | Urgent [0]
  

Home / Writing Feedback   % width   Posts: 2


is this brief remark correct?



ccppg 1 / -  
Mar 23, 2008   #1
here is the story:
Our vicar is always raising money for one cause or another, but he has never managed to get enough money to have the church clock repaired. The big clock which used to strike the hours day and night was damaged during the war and has been silent ever since.

One night, however, our vicar woke up with a start: the clock was striking the hours! Looking at his watch, he saw that it was one o'clock, but the bell struck thirteen times before it stopped.

Armed with a torch, the vicar went up into the clock tower to see what was going on. In the torchlight, he caught sight of a figure whom he immediately recognized as Bill Wilkins, our local grocer.

'Whatever are you doing up here Bill ?' asked the vicar in surprise.

' I'm trying to repair the bell,' answered Bill.' I've been coming up here night after night for weeks now. You see, I was hoping to give you a surprise.'

'You certainly did give me a surprise!'said the vicar. 'You've probably woken up everyone in the village as well. Still, I'm glad the bell is working again.'

'That's the trouble, vicar,' answered Bill. 'It's working all right, but I'm afraid that at one o'clock it will strike thirteen times and there's nothing 1 can do about it.'

'We'll get used to that Bill,' said the vicar. 'Thirteen is not as good as one ,but it's better than nothing. Now let's go downstairs and have a cup of tea.'

and here is my remark:

The vicar didn't care about the damaged church clock.That was figured out from two facts:
First, the priest raised a lot of money, but he never used the funds to repair the clock.
Second, Bill Wilkins ,the local grocer ,fixed the clock without being able to deal with the wrong striking, which is a very annoying noise, yet the vicar didn't see the problem as a big deal.

EF_Team2 1 / 1703  
Mar 24, 2008   #2
Greetings!

It would be easier for me to know whether your remark is "correct" if I knew what the assignment had asked you to do. However, if you were supposed to surmise how the vicar felt about the clock, I think you hit the nail on the head! Your analysis seems logical to me; the clock, and its ability to function, was not particularly important to the vicar.

Keep up the good work!

Thanks,

Sarah, EssayForum.com


Home / Writing Feedback / is this brief remark correct?
Need Writing or Editing Help?
Fill out one of these forms:

Graduate Writing / Editing:
GraduateWriter form ◳

Best Essay Service:
CustomPapers form ◳

Excellence in Editing:
Rose Editing ◳

AI-Paper Rewriting:
Robot Rewrite ◳

Academic AI Writer:
Custom AI Writer ◳