As it has been discussed in the previous post, I want you to pay particular attention to your overview, since this utterly affects your score in Task Achievement. It is always good to write a 2-sentence overview. Also, you need more words. If you write less than 150 words, then you'll get penalized.
his figure accounted for 70 percent in 2011 and the following a half decade raised slightly to 73 percent
this needs more improvement. A closer look at my sample;This figure accounted for 70 percent in 2011, while the following a half decade raised slightly to 73 percent. There seemed to be a rise of 3% in 5 years. This is in stark contrast to the figure for visitors showing the reverse. 2001 to 2006 experienced a decrease, from 10% to 6%.
hope this helps, eddy suaib.