CANADIANS SCHOLARS from a third level of education in Canada - the rising trend

QUESTION:
The graph below shows the number of university graduates of university in Canada from 1992 to 2007

ANSWER:

The graph illustrates an overview about the number of graduated scholars from a third level of education in Canada, over the last fifteen years. Overall, the both sex learners who graduated in the first two-years were declined slightly. However the female students reached a peak over the last five years.

Initially, the female proportion broke the record as the highest one. This was followed by male level with roughly 70,000. By the next year the quantities of females were decreased slowly in 100,000 within three years and increased steadily by 1,000 graduates in 2000 while the proportion of male was decreased and increased gradually within six years.

Eventually, the largest number of Canadian learners who were graduated from the third level of education was females. Between 2000 and 2006 males were increased approximately by 25,000 of graduates yet the Canadian females were climbed to reach a peak by 45,000 graduates.

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I can see some grammatical errors that need addressing.

"The graph illustrates an overview [...] a peak over the last five years. "

This could be improved as follows:

"The graph illustrates the number of graduates of a third level of education in Canada, over the last 15 years. The graduation rate of both sexes initially declined. However, from around 2001 onwards, the number of female students rose dramatically, reaching a peak in 2006."

Hope this helps.