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IELTS-is change required or not?



ajit88rai 22 / 186  
Jan 26, 2011   #1
TOPIC:-
Some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same things and avoiding change. Others, however, think that change is always a good thing.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

answer-

Life is full of changes.Right from the birth to attaining old age, the only thing which remains constant is - a change. Some prefer to remain in a shell and do the same things repeatedly, while others support the view that change is essential.In fact, the worst thing in life is monotony. A change is quintessential and a necessity for an individual.

Right from our school days,one thing we learn is -practice makes a man perfect. This approach is excellent for attaining expertise in a field.Consistency is a trait desired by many.For instance-Curie couples would had never found radium , if they were not consistent and focussed to extract a small possible quantity from a high magnitude of pitch blende. But what after one attains expertise or reaches the goal? Everyone need to move on and find a new goal, a change to live the life.

A wise man once said, "Not all people live the life, mostly just exist". A change is important to keep people interested, excited and focussed. The mind will get bored and saturated if one keeps doing the same things repeatedly. Change is really important to keep the brain working and interested. When one gets bored, any task seems like a burden. A burden is never desired by anyone and hence, mistakes are bound to occur.

Nevertheless, change is really important to learn about life and to respond to different situations.In life, an individual will not face the same situations, again and again. If a student is taught same book of history repeatedly,throughout the school life, will he/she learn anything new? No.Change helps to enhance knowledge. Without a change, one's ability will be very limited , which would be a disadvantage in this modern world. For example, modern companies wish to hire an individual who is a MBA with an engineering degree. This approach will add versatility and the individual would be able to do the work of both, a manager and a technician.

A common belief is that, ' a rolling stone gathers no moss'. This is true for people who don't want to work and look for easier alternatives.Frequent changes don't help in the long run. A change is necessary, but only at it's optimum time.

Thus , I personally believe that life is all about exploring new horizons and experiencing new things. Monotonous life becomes a burden. In life, change is essential for facing new challenges and not lagging behind due to fear.

sabrinayaa 12 / 22  
Jan 26, 2011   #2
hi
I think that this sentence A wise man once said, "Not all people live the life, mostly just exist". A change is important to keep people interested, excited and focussed... is not fully stated, what do you think if we give a example to support that point? I don't know if it's a rule when we have essay, do we give a example for every main point?

This sentence Nevertheless, change is really important to learn about life and to respond to different situations.In life, an individual will not face the same situations, again and again. , I think it's very great.
OP ajit88rai 22 / 186  
Jan 26, 2011   #3
- Well Sabrina, I know example needs to be given, but there is also a limit. I cant keep giving examples for all the points states...else it wud become a thesis instead of an essay...my word count for this essay is already 418...which is 168 words more than the minimum limit...

-thanks for praising that line. I hope u liked the essay and any further advices would be great...since u r online right now..u can contact me on my chat ids/email to get anymore help.This website is really great and helps a lot, but I think we both can exchange our essays daily n give ideas...i already mail my essays to 5 more frnds who are also preparing for this.

- feel free to ask anytime for any help related to this. i am always working on my writing skills online....thanks and enjoy
renga78 6 / 17  
Jan 27, 2011   #4
A common belief is that, ' a rolling stone gathers no moss'. This is true for people who don't want to work and look for easier alternatives.Frequent changes don't help in the long run. A change is necessary, but only at it's optimum time.

This paragraph could be avoided. When the whole essay talks about the change, this paragraph at the very end suddenly taking a diversion from the main point. Otherwise, yet another good essay.
OP ajit88rai 22 / 186  
Jan 28, 2011   #5
thanks Raj...i will keep this thing in mind...pls do review my other essays...only 14 days left in my exam.
EF_Susan - / 2310  
Feb 1, 2011   #6
A common expression is: Practice makes perfect.
That is a common cliche in English. But it is NOT good to say it makes "a man" perfect, because there is no reason to exclude women from what is being said. We do that too often in the English language.

You have a lot of wise expressions in this essay. I like it! Capitalize the first word when you include a quote or expression:
A common belief is as follows: "A rolling stone gathers no moss."

:-)


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